You disappoint me.
Why can't you see,
that I love you.
And I wish you did too.
I stare at you,
not meaning to,
but you have me mesmerized,
so bad I want to cry.
Why can't I get over it.
This can't turn out good.
My heart is going to be broken again.
And no one will lend me theirs.
I have no one to confide in.
No one to turn too.
I'm alone,
and desperate for attention.
So you disappoint me.
Because you can't see,
that this pretty girl,
is crying for you.
A contest entry
- I by N e a r.
2300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 220 entries
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Comments
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I loved the line about no one lending you their heart, =] that one really stuck out. But the whole piece of very full of emotion, and the second to last line, I think a lot of people can relate to that. I know I can
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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well
Young love can be very trying but also leave us with wonderful memories. Be kind to yourself and let love find you.
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Awe this was so heartfelt and full of emotio I loved this so much. Always know that you can talk to your sister if you need anything.
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great job
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Reminds me of a poem I would write back in 2003.. Although the ending wouldn't pertain to me, LOL.
I'm not that pretty (OK, maybe I'm sorta a pretty boy)... LOL
This is a very touching poem, in a emotional and personal way. I like how you used the word "disappointed" instead of common ones like "hurt, killed, etc."
Nicely done!
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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very emotional, raw and powerful! keep writing! dont' let them tear you down. you always have friends here at AllPoetry to confide in, don't ever feel you have to go it alone. if you need someone to listen, you can talk to me.
many blessings and *stomps
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Wow this is sad and really good
Thanks for entering and good luck
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