the sun slept in
tangled gardens,
summer, me.
hints of light caught
you, for a while,
if only
in reflections.
Author notes
Another write for a dead loved one. I feel nostalgic tonight. :/
A contest entry
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400 points, ended January 24, 2008, 9 entries
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Beautiiful poem. Nostalgic like you have said, but beautiful and very relatable to anyone who has lost someone to death, going away or the end of something beautiful.
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Awww
This reminded me of someone, too. Maybe they're not physically dead, but, yeah, lol. This was had a light, feathery, yet somewhat somber feeling to it. I always like to pick out how it makes me feel 
This reminded me of my grandma, too. Very beautiful 
Jeanette*~
P.S. Good luck in the contest, and congrats on teh other shineys
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There is nothing I can think of to improve this piece. It is flawless to me and I must say an incredible piece of work.
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I got the perfect picture in my head of a garden by your descriptions painted with such lovely words here. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with my contest. the sun slept in tangled gardens, summer, me. Love it ll, but especially that
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your word arangements make one really think on many levels onto what the purpose of your words mean. I took this to represent a 'love' that was only the image of love and not the real, true, unconditional love. Great job on this, it is like a puzzel. :-D
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Great concept and poem. Good luck in this contest. My favorite part was:
hints of light caught
you, for a while,
if only
in reflections.
De-Throne
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Congrats on the contest, this was a very beautiful poem, I can honestly say that I was beaten by a better poem! not many contests I enter can I say that...lol...Best wishes! -Jay
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this is creatively beautiful and immensely captivating... Thanks ever so much for sharing... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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