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victorian garden

the sun slept in
tangled gardens,
summer, me.

hints of light caught
you, for a while,
if only

in reflections.

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Another write for a dead loved one. I feel nostalgic tonight. :/

A contest entry

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  • Pollycheck silver member
    May 25

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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. I think that you have written a very lovely and well written poem.

  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    May 20

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    Awww This reminded me of someone, too. Maybe they're not physically dead, but, yeah, lol. This was had a light, feathery, yet somewhat somber feeling to it. I always like to pick out how it makes me feel This reminded me of my grandma, too. Very beautiful
    Jeanette*~
    P.S. Good luck in the contest, and congrats on teh other shineys


  • Enchanted Death
    April 1

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    There is nothing I can think of to improve this piece. It is flawless to me and I must say an incredible piece of work.


  • Blooming Poet Greeters member
    March 6
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    I got the perfect picture in my head of a garden by your descriptions painted with such lovely words here. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with my contest. the sun slept in tangled gardens, summer, me. Love it ll, but especially that

  • LuzAradia gold member
    March 3
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    your word arangements make one really think on many levels onto what the purpose of your words mean. I took this to represent a 'love' that was only the image of love and not the real, true, unconditional love. Great job on this, it is like a puzzel. :-D


  • De-Throned
    February 14

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    Great concept and poem. Good luck in this contest. My favorite part was:
    hints of light caught
    you, for a while,
    if only

    in reflections.

    De-Throne

  • ImJay
    January 28

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    Congrats on the contest, this was a very beautiful poem, I can honestly say that I was beaten by a better poem! not many contests I enter can I say that...lol...Best wishes! -Jay

  • Gypsy-Princess gold member
    January 24

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    this is creatively beautiful and immensely captivating... Thanks ever so much for sharing... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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