Your lips open,
My heart races.
Words once spoken
Like echoed traces.
Time erases
Heart felt tokens
In empty cases.
A contest entry
- share 20 words by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended January 24, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautifully detailed and rhythmic... Thanks ever so much for sharing... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it very much!
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To the Point, beautiful and comes across perfectly. Magnificant piece of work!!
"Heart felt tokens
In empty cases. "
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Thanks Lissa, it was a little frustrating trying to keep it under 20 words, but the fact that I got it to convey the point with as little words as I did is pretty eye opening for me...Thanks for the comment, I truly appreciate it!
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WOW
SO short but SO amazing!!! I loved it! Ah! *reads it again*
I read it again! I love it!w00t for Slick!
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I am glad you loved it Hannah, aparently it wasnt good enough for the gold though
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