In green ocean,
slowly
descending
hair floats
upwards
eyes closed.
A contest entry
- share 10 words by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended January 24, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ooohhh...
intense imagery in so few words!
love the green ocean, hair floating upwards with eyes closed...
dark and rich penning, sir...
I could take this is so many directions...
brevity is your friend indeed...
Blessings! Tammy
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This is metaphorically brilliant. This is how I feel lately. You have exquisite skill in being concise yet bringing expression to the forefront. Nice work Mal.
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im throwing you a life preserver....
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GREAT imagery...You are so wonderful with short poems...You give so much power to few words. It is always a joy to read you...Like opening a gift every time...
Lynda
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Thanks for the lovely comment Lynda...its always nice to read your comments...I must check my faves list..I know your on it..but never see your poems...
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this is deeply grasping and intensely compelling. Wish
I had of seen this one. Hope clappies suffice now though... Love and light, Lavender Butterfly. 
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