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Lost in Thought

Staring straight ahead,
looking but seeing nothing.
You say hello, how are you?,
but I'm lost in thought.

Staring at the floor,
eyes open yet blinded.
You wave in front of my eyes,
but I'm lost in thought.

Staring at my text book,
attentive yet oblivious.
You snap in my face,
but I'm lost in thought.

Staring at the clouds,
seeing nothing but white.
You storm away unnoticed,
because I'm lost in thought.

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  • munkiess
    May 10, 2008
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    this is goof, i like the repetition. i know this feeling, i get it at school all the time. great write.


  • munkiess
    May 10, 2008

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    this is goof, i like the repetition. i know this feeling, i get it at school all the time. great write.


  • beautifuldisaster91
    April 11, 2008

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    I really love this one. It has a certain appeal to it. That sounded weird but it is true. Its great!


  • CanadianGirl1
    April 10, 2008

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    Very Nicely Done!!
    You've done very well with this.. and I absolutely loved it.. sometimes we really dont notice someone so important because we get so lost in our own little world of thoughts and feelings. You've captured that feeling, and told the story very well.

    Great Job!


  • Kelli Marie
    April 9, 2008

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    A very nice write. We often stare of in space with nothing on our minds. I love that relaxing time. A great piece.
    Kelli


  • Amera gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    This is really good! You have painted a wonderful image of emotion in this quatrain and the repeating line is very powerful.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    yes this truly a way to get lost in thought, nice poem to start off with to get your point across, good luck with it Lin


  • Kram
    April 1, 2008
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    I like it

    but I dont know why!


  • JinSays gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Wonderful Chrissy. I too have these moments..all the time, as a matter of fact. This is one of my favorites of yours. I think you did a fantastic job.
    Expand if you want, leave it, it's up to you..
    Love,
    Jin


  • jcat gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Actually this has great potential....I think it could be expanded on a bit more. Like why are you lost in thought?? Who storms off unnoticed?? Excellent beginning here....But if you think it is perfect than I think so too!! You truly are gifted at writing and making the reader wonder..

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