Today is the day
That I sit alone in the cafe
No one to notice me
No one that cares
He dosen't love me anymore
But I can't except it
After all that I've done for him
He leaves me alone
Defending for myself
I am alone
A contest entry
- ALL ALONE!!!!!! by kales4.
375 points, ended February 15, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So how is it?
Comments
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww it's sad! You're not alone Ru! I'm here now *duh duh duh duhhhh!* lol anyway, good job. I really did like it!
:~Erin~:
RAWR!!!
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u show potential. I think u have a spelling erroe thought, that is if the word u were looking for was "accept" in the sixth line. On such a short poem one must try to make sure that a great climax is possible because very few lines are there to accomplish it. keep the ink flowing!
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Thank you for entering my contest! This poem was very short and sweet. In the fourth line i think "on" should be "one"... and the fifth line "dosn't" should be "doesn't" Excellen write Good Luck
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