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Bonded Souls Longing

From natures amber sunlight glow
come bridge of rivers gentle hands
lifting love out of torrent waters flow
holding dreams from another land.

He holds her precious in hearts palm
with visions of where his soul belongs
finding strength in her feelings calm
like the melodies of a nightingales songs.

Is it my hands holding her safe
or is she giving purpose to my grip
we have found our loves lost waif
may time and distance not let our hearts,
through our fingers slip.

Longing turns each hour into eternities
through tree limbs of distance apart
shine faiths sun bright coruscate entities
divided by ocean, melded by heart.

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  • Xianaria
    July 25, 2008
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    congrats on the gold! hmmm you beat lisa, better watch your head! kidding!!!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 23, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 30, 2008

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    A very beautiful poem about love and I really enjoy the rhyming scheme. The flow was slightly choppy in the 3rd stanza and that is really the only think i can say about it negatively. Its really is a beautiful poem. Thanks for entering it in my contest and good luck


  • Tangled Angle
    February 28, 2008
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    Nice poem with a good flow. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • N e a r
    February 25, 2008

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    There are a lot of beautiful expressions in this piece. My favorite was "finding strength in her feelings calm / like the melodies of a nightingales songs". Your words are very flowing as well. To write from a prompt takes a certain bit of creativity, and this poem did a good job of that. Nicely done. Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck! M a r l u x i a


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    Very beautiful indeed, I loved your choice of words, they really captivate. I also love that picture, it's really surrealistic, but it's very beautiful.


  • dustookie2
    February 7, 2008
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    CONGRATULATIONS on the Gold ...... another bling to add to your page ..... very nicely crafted .....


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Wonderful rhythm, rhyme and flow to this lovely poem. Excellent interpretation of the picture prompt given for this contest. Lovely gold to add to your collection as well. LOvely metaphor used throughout these lines.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 7, 2008

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    This is so beautifully divine, I got swept away by the grace and softness of this one

    Thank you for entering this contest, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen


  • FairyJ
    January 26, 2008

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    poetic genius

    This is a rich poem of great imagery and emotion. The composition is brilliant. I like it very much!


  • Dorie
    January 26, 2008
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    I know excactly what you are talking about. In my native language, we say "WAGONA"


  • MustangTommy
    January 26, 2008

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    WOW Genious is right. I'm Not worthy I'm Not worthy Distant relationship, never had one. must be the hardest love to keep alive.

  • ViolentShadesofGray
    January 25, 2008

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    man your genious

    the spilling of thought....the symbolism and hightened depth of emotion....man are you in touch within your self...bravo my friend i see great talent


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 25, 2008

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    You have captured this picture and made it your own. Your words were exciting. Thank you for sharing such a beauty.
    Good luck in the contest...
    Soulful Woman


  • Shassidy
    January 25, 2008

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    I really liked your interpretation of this picture. The poem was filled with vivid imagery and the rhyming worked really well for the flow of this piece. The last couple of lines in stanza 3 didn't seem to flow as well as the rest of it did, but it was a great poem. I loved the lines "Is it my hands holding her safe / or is she giving purpose to my grip", those were powerful because it can be looked at both ways. Great job and good luck in the contest!

  • dustookie2
    January 25, 2008

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    If you ever wonder why you are on my hit list....the answer is in your hands...A touching interpretation on the picture prompt to be held within the lines and words gives bonded souls pure love.The fingers will not part when melded with love The flow, the imagery and the expressive emotions from the heart good luck in the contest.


  • penman gold member
    January 24, 2008
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    Excellent

    Terrific interpretation of the picture. Very vivid descriptions. Best of luck in the contest.


    • Roaddog Wolf
      January 24, 2008
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      THANKS PENMAN

      It's always an uplift to get a review from you. glad you liked it, slowly but surely I believe I am learning to write some fair poetry, consistently fair,....lol, well thats another story
      thanks

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