Only my mirror knows how real my pain;
that I only pretend to be caught in the rain
when mascara runs in streams down my face,
I walk past a crowd, and smile, with grace.
When inside, I am falling apart slowly,
I kneel in prayer to all that is holy
to fill my heart with strength anew,
and brighten these skies of darkened hue.
Then I fell into a rainbow-shaded dream
my sadness flittering away, upstream
dancing to a voice I heard from afar
as lashes dry to sweet sounds of his guitar.
and suddenly the sunset has a new glow;
I can smell Spring coming, but taste the snow.
In this place of splendor I found to hide
where just for awhile, the worries subside.
I thought I heard him say as I rose in a sigh;
"Be careful...you'll make the whole world cry."
♥♥
Author notes
pic inspired
inspired by a friend
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired 2 by jasminerose.
700 points, ended February 10, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this definatly makes you sigh, beautiful write...
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Sigh~Such a lovely and most beautiful poem written from the depths of your heart with love and all that it gives! Such beautiful imagery and striking lines:
Then I fell into a rainbow-shaded dream... my sadness flittering away, upstream...your words of sadness and hope have touched this readers heart!
Just beautiful!
Thank you for entering this outstanding poem in my contest!
Jazzy
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Beautiful! I love the sentiment of this, of not having to pretend, of finding someone who can brush away the shadows and help you let go and find the joy in life. This really is touching, and so beautuifully done with rhyme. Last two lines took this to a whole other level of meaning, amazing. Best of luck in the contest!
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Such a flood of joy and wisdom, I love this angel-poet...the whole world needs a good cry...and I need inspiration from an effervescent angel....lovely verse...
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Excellent
What a skillful use of rhyme. And terrific interpretation of the picture. Best of luck in the contest.
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i think what captivates me the most here, besides the flow, beyond the rhyme, is the voice of a heart in search of understanding with acceptance - to be seen "as is" and loved anyway - least that's what hits me hardest - bringing tears to my own eyes as i read this, wishing my pain away. A marvelous poetic vison and a trophy winner for sure.
blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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oh, thank you so much! It is as if you have read my mind
I have not written rhyme in a long time, but emotion, to me is always # 1 in poetry so your comment is so special to me...sigh~ I cannot thank you enough!
Lynda
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Excellent
This poem is excellent the flow perfect and the story behind the poem emotional. I think we all have a special place where we can go to in our dreams and escape the sorrows of life. this place you have here brings the lift that a heart needs from time to time. best wishes in this contest Brian.
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what a lovely poem here, so full of the way we simply feel sometimes, a little lost and then by faith or a friend we seem to be found... beautiful poetry here...PK
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