Today,
I cried.
With every word that you spoke,
My heart produced another crack.
With every compliment uttered,
My heart did another jolt.
My stomach was engulfed,
Knots inside twisting,
turning.
Today,
I failed.
Every ounce of hope imaginable,
Crunched by your honest words.
I feel no hatred, nor negativity
Towards your loving beautiful face.
I know there is a God now, through you.
Only perfect could have produced perfect,
Only a miracle, can produce a miracle.
Today,
I bled.
A fact that I will carry,
For what I think will be the longest time ever.
I have walked down many roads paved with sadness,
But never so long as this one seems to be
I am burried so deep within my own sorrow,
That only my own shadow can find me.
Where everything is shattered, broken, crushed.
Today,
I hurt.
Pleading for a chance,
Knowing I could make you happy,
Happy beyond your wildest dreams.
Knowing I would give it all,
Over and over again,
Just to see your dimples,
Along with your angelic breath-taking smile.
Today,
I sleep.
Knowing that tomorrow will be hard.
Knowing that everyday from now,
Will hurt.
I understand it all,
Yet remain in denial of it all.
Today,
I loved.
Tomorrow,
I cry.
******Published 3rd November 2004*******
Author notes
Goodluck judging!! Option 1
Written November 14th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Options, options, options!!!!! by BrokenHeartAnicdote.
300 points, ended October 26, 2006, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Thank you for a very sweet comment.
Good luck judging sweet.
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wow!....wow! i loved this piece. i mean, it doesn't apply directly to my life, but i did love it. good luck in my contest.
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This is very well done and I must admit I really like the repetition of it, it adds to the force of the piece. Fantastic poem! Bravo!
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Thank you very very much for such a lovely comment. Thank you!!!
chris -
There is not too many pieces of work that have truely spoken to me as if the author is looking into my soul. This spoke of a love that I have had and lost. You touched on the emotion that was felt and continues to be even now. This is really superb writting and I'm sure you will fare very well in this contest. Best of luck to you.
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this is awesome! i hope you win!
Michelle -
this is such a beautiful poem! you should appreciate it and it just may be the best poem ever! thank you for submitting this! i wished i could have wrote that. i am definately going to print this one out. thank you. i love the description in this and how i feel it and see it. its just great! i surely do hope you win!
Michelle -
Thank you very very much! I am truly flattered.
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Wow.. I am just speechless! That is by far one of the best poems on here! Well done! And thanks for entering!
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This was a truly great write. Im glad you entered. Good luck. =)
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thank you all for such amazing comments.
Glad to know you like my work.
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The person did not die, nor was it a break up. It was more of a realization, kinda like the person died to me. hehe. Cheers for the lovely comment
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Wow what else can I say
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I liked how it ended, liked how it started, it was beautiful, I could easily read that poem again, it was such a powerful piece, and I to wish you luck with the contest.
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good job
i love the different emotions that you state after each today, brings a great sense of reality and emotion to this piece nice job keep writing
~Raven -
you kind of make it sound like the person died, and I'm wondering if that is what it is or if it's a break-up. You describe it so vividly and emotionally, it's very nice the way you wrote this. keep it up.
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awsome poem....very strong and full of emotion.. u deserve to win this contest good luck
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beautiful, this peice was so sad. the feelings expressd in this poem are so raw, i can identfy with alot of them. i wouldent change athing about this poem.
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Excellent work, filled with emotion!!!
Very emotional work. Sad and beautiful all at once. Your words produced images so clear. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. 
Joyce
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GREAT!
great write!!! i really like the descriptive words!!! GREAT WRITE!!! keep up the good work! -
I really like your poems. Who ever reads it will be truely touched. This poem might relate to some people and the other people.... I do not know about. I really do like this pome I give to two thumbs up on this one.
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Great
your poem is really good i really liked reading it. i am not really good at giving comments but your poem is great and i don't know what to say -
it's so sweet... i think i am going to cry.
-Tara- -
great poem..I could feel the pain..
Love is so beautiful yet so painful..
I'm in love..and ur poem made me cry..so deep and sad!
well done
Luv
Neha -
Love the pattern, the theme, the words, everything! I LOVE IT! I dunno what else to say about it I just really liked it! Full of emotion! Keep Penning! And thanks soo much for entering!
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very well writen
Wow, this was undoubtedly beautiful. I love the way you wrote this, but unfortunately it didn’t make me cry.
~squeekers~
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this was a great and understanding write thanks for entering Raneika
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Powerful ending. Heck, you could've had a poem just of those last four lines and it would be worth the read still. They sum up nicely what the entire poem is trying to say, although it was all very entertaining to read. Thanks much for entering.
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Good Job
This was amazing. You truely have a great talent in writing. You put your emotions so well into what you write and I love that. The last part of your poem was my favorite. The ending made the piece even more heartbreaking but so good. Very nice write. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Yesterday, today and tomorrow..
A poem pulled from the deepest place - that place that is even deeper than pain. And yes, only love can make us feel this way. Very sad...it moves mountains within. I liked how you repeated the word "today" to stress the importance of this day in comparison to "tomorrow" - where today is love and tomorrow is tears. It's been a long time since I've read your poetry and I am glad to have found you again amongst the romantic hearts! Take care and thanks for sharing a great piece.
~ Nicolette
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great job
wow, this was really good. i liked how you started off each stanza with a 1 word line, then a 2 word line, then it was kind of freedome of word numbers, lol. i really liked how you ended it with
Today,
I loved.
Tomorrow,
I cry.
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this was really good.. i like the repeating of "today I" Good job on the poem
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this is realy good and quite moving, good write
well done and thanx for entering my contest!!
xxxxx
Kim xxxxx
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very good. i like deep poems! yay for deepness!
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this was a great write and keep up the good work. it was a very deep poem
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woooh baby! this poem is really really good the second stanza was my favorite wow very good!! :-d
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that was a great read....i liked it.....good job.(my favorite part was the last 4 lines.....)
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gorgeous
i dunno how to compliment this piece any more than it already has been, and i sure as hell am not gunna critisise it, becuz in my eyes .. its just perfect .. i love it so much. its getting bookmarked and ur getting an applause .... i dunno how else to show u how much i love this poem!!! -
Oh...that is so sad. I agree with Maryangel a lot! I like the 2nd stanza thing! Great job! Thank you for entering and Good Luck!
~*Kelsi Michelle*~ -
EXCELLENT WORK !
nOW THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST PIECES IVE READ THE WHOLE ENTIRE MORNING YOU DID AN EXCELLENT JOB , THIS IS SO FULL OF EMOTIONS AND COMPLETE MEANING TO EVERYTHING YOU EXPRESS , IT HAS COMPLETE THOUGHTS WRITTEN ALL OVER FOR ONE WHO TRUELY READS IT , CONGRATULATIONS YOU GOT MY APPLAUSE ! SINCERELY MARY
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Wow.. that poem says so much. And I cannot even believe how much I can relate to that. It brought up a lot of pain, but I loved it.. Never has a poem made me feel like that. Wow, I am in awe. I am shaking.. my eyes have tears in them. Amazing, truly... You have done a brilliant job with this piece.. And I can feel your emotions through your words. Not a single poet that I've read works by has expressed so much sorrow, and sadness and yet a deranged thought of hope in one piece.. But those are just my interpretations.. those are just the emotions I got from this piece. I've read some of your other poems, but this one is far beyond amazing. This poem is AMAZING!! The whole poem is just perfect, but there were just a few lines that seemed to jump at me..
"I know there is a God now, through you.
Only perfect could have produced perfect,
Only a miracle, can produce a miracle."
This poem should be read by ever poet, aspiring poet, and, well, just every person who has ever felt the pain of love... Truly an amazing write. Thank you for sharing your poetry, though it hurts. God Bless. -
i liked this poem. i think it was really good. my favorite part was:
Today,
I bled.
A fact that I will carry,
For what I think will be the longest time ever.
A pathetic image looks back at me in the mirror,
Knowing I care so much,
When people normally don't care at all.
Knowing I dream so much,
When they are shattered, broken, crushed.
-Jessica- -
I liked this, it was well written, unusual and although the repeating of ''today'' at the start of every stanza got on my nerves a little bit it fitted in with the whole flow and theme of the poem.
Take care and keep writing, Heather x
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Superb
These words are saturated with emotion and unselfish love.
That's what makes this such a gripping piece.
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Very sad..deep and revealing. Good luck!
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I enjoyed the read, felt the sorrow and anguish ...great job, good luck with contest
shastadaisey123 -
This is a very emotional write, you express the pain and the bittersweetness that love can bring. I like the structure you used, it was orginal and it flowed very well.
Thank you for sharing. Take care and write on!
~Mystikal~ -
I did like it a lot jsut like the rest of them but i really do think there is an element of unexpressed agression missing here, i really loved the structure of this poem though...just really worked with the whole thing...nice poem i throuhgly enjoyed it.
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i liked this alot. its such a shame that we all have to go through this, that happiness can be such a fleeting thing. its one of the more raw points of life that i guess we all wish we could change. this is the first poem of yours that i have read as far as i know and i really like it, so i'll be sure to read more. you are very talented, you reached me like very few poets can. great work, keep it up.
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I haven't read anything else of yours but this. So I don't know if it has been 'ages" since you wrote anything good. But I do know this one is good. It says so much about what love gives and what love takes. I'm thinking I may go read some more of your work. Bluebird
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wow, that was a great poem. So much emotion, it just blew me away. you've truly put the feelings of love and pain into words. great job and I hope things get better for you
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Wow, that was really really good. I really liked the way you set it up with starting each part as Today, I....whatever it was you did. And then at the end you went to what you'll do tomorrow. It was a nice way to write something I liked it. Oh and love's a bitch it's true it hurts soo much sometimes. Hopefully things get better for you
Good write though, nice job and keep up the terrific work.
~Cait~ -
I liked the rhythm, nice feel. Liked the way you repeated today & at the end tomorrow. The concept wasnt a bad idea.
Well done.
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Today
I loved
Even though, like you say, love breed pain, love is also something that is rarely felt this strongly and you are lucky to have someone you love this much. Even though it hurts, it is also something that will make you stronger and drag you through life.
great write
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aww, chris! why do you hurt, dear heart?? very well written,..saddish,...tears for you
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