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parted

your lips parted
a sea from which

no memory echoes.

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  • if sighing
    January 24, 2008

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    This is just to say

    that out all of the quickies that you've recently posted, I like this one the best. Why? Bias and that fact that it could be as simple as an every day memory lapse.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    beautifully written with such power in your words. i loved how you paint imagery with this aswell.;best of luck


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Ooh, this is exquisite! You said so much in so little... Well done, and good luck in the contest!