Imperfection in your heart and perfection in mine,
a different view on the same promise.
A tear to the heart could make them seem ugly and worn,
but also human in the sense of wanting.
You look to the blank calling of what you want to see,
but nothing looks more willing then someone who tries.
A broken way of living may seem weak and falling away,
and sometimes it can seem like the green grass on the other side.
Sometimes you think your too different to coop or become,
a senseless dragging on your soul pulling you down.
I'm sure if you saw the differences in everyone else around,
you would see how special it makes you instead of alienated.
Take a look into my mind and make yourself known to the other,
for you really have no flaw that pushes me away from you.
But when even when your shell goes up and your away in your world,
I can't wait to take my hammer and break it down with a smile.
You seem to think that everything you have is all wrong nothing to salvage,
but I seem to see the blank stare of the world in the happy way you don't.
You just so human to me and never shall i hate you for what you are,
for you and my imperfection made perfect.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended February 6, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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"But when even when your shell goes up and your away in your world, I can't wait to take my hammer and break it down with a smile." This is so sweet and the rest of the piece is truly heartfelt...thank you for sharing this fantastic write...
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I love how you use the contrasting elements in this poem and merge them to actually 'click' together.
Wonderful job with this writing.
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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