Torture, anguish, agony
Trapped on all sides
Unable to see
Everything I want
Right in front of me;
Inaccessible, Unobtainable
Taunting, teasing, flaunting
So hauntingly beautiful
So sweet, so succulent, so ripe; perfection
The one thing illogical,
What I cannot have
Emotionless, no feeling- no pride
Endless waves on all sides,
No safe rock to hold or take weight
Where to put all this negative freight?
Unable to cast off excess cargo
To save myself from this storm
Unable to hold it above angry waters
Lost, alone, frightened
-as a child in a wood
To save me from this hell
Only two people could
Trapped in a house of love
Where some love-
And others ignore
Me this weighted shell
Afloat in the murderous sea of life
The question remains:
Will I survive?-
Of course-
No one does.
So how will they remember me?
How will I help others?
Leave my mark?
Will I help souls like me?
How will they remember you?
After our bones are dust…
Use your breathe today-
For tomorrow is already gone.
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Nice
The flow is great, and I love your use of words
Taunting, teasing, flaunting
So hauntingly beautiful
So sweet, so succulent, so ripe; perfection
The one thing illogical,
What I cannot have
This part is perfection
~♥*SAVINA*♥~ -
Life feels like torture
i think people need to share their feelings more. poetry is a great way to channel it. I think you really channeled something great here. I can say one hundred percent that I have felt like you do.
"So breathe on little sister, like a fool" portishead...was just listening to that song, thought it fit!
Good luck in the times ahead.
creatress
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great job. i love how the stanzas flow well even though they're all different. congrats.
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Good
I like what you've done with this poem, the flow in it is just amazing! Good work!
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Beautiful. I loved the diversity of this poem, how each stanza is completely different. It kept my attention all the way through for this reason, and you use beautifully descriptive words. well done.
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Wow, Alicia..... this is great.. I really love this one.. it really goes along with this situation... Trust me, i can relate to it... just remember you can tell me anything!
~Jen
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