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Begging for Gold

I've got Gold trophies - I need more!
I'm a goldaholic whore -
show me
gold and I'm your ball
Bounce me
up against the fence or wall
throw me.

For gold
I'll be your china cup
fill me.
Drink me empty
wash me up
spill me.

For gold
I'll be your pennies.
Lend me
invest me or save me
gamble me and lose me
keep me for a rainy day
spend me.

For gold
I'll be a promise
make me
keep me
forget me
renew me or regret me
break me.

For gold
I'll be your secret vice
indulge me
covertly enjoy me
publicly deny me
ask your god forgive me
on the quiet live me

For gold
you can
throw me and spill me
spend me or break me or live me
JUST GIMME-GIMME-GIMME-GIMME GIVE ME!

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  • violetrose
    May 2, 2008

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    Ha, I like this one! It's got a great flow that feels effortless. I've always been a fan of repetition in poetry, and you use it to a great effect here. The stanza about being a promise is my favorite...I love the idea. And the end is wonderful, kind of childish but still serious. Fantastic job!


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    March 12, 2008
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    The irony here is: this doesn't seem to be entered in a contest. Too funny! Tell you what, for ten quid, I'll rent you a gold for a month, for a hundred I'll sell you an autographed virtual trophy to display proudly on your virtual shelf. I'm sure Kevin won't mind a little under the table tit for tat here.

  • Goldfist
    March 8, 2008

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    nice

    I'm reminded of a nine inch nails song. "head like a hole". "Got money, I'll do anything for you..." I like it.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    February 16, 2008
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    Great write...enjoyed the story...

  • lovelydesdemona
    January 25, 2008
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    Excellent job. You really have a quite a talent, and I'm glad that you share it with us.


  • poppyday
    January 25, 2008
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    I think you have the Midas touch and certainly gold fever

    Nevertheless, a very jolly jape.


  • daviscth silver member
    January 24, 2008
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    LOL. What imagery you projected into this piece. You should have lots of cups on your page.

  • Flamecaster
    January 24, 2008
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    lol...love it...


  • Arizona Sunset
    January 24, 2008

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    lol getting a kick out of these love it! best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha

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