Strip me my Lion unhurriedly,
we have all the eternity.
Your wonderful touch fondling me,
sending shudders of excitement to my being.
Your tongue traveling all over me, tasting me,
teasing me, arousing me beyond belief,
Inspecting every curvature and spot.
Your fingers stroking skillfully my wet garden
unleashing sweet nectars of infatuation
gushing into hot springs drenching my love portal,
Just at the thought of you,
your flesh brushing mine
provoking my untamed need for your love.
Your stokes opening my thighs
for your caresses and your prowess to penetrate
the smooth pussy ready to solely delight my Sultan
and receive gratification by no one save my master.
I surrender to your commands and desires giving in
to your amorous control,
turning me over, upside down
Together moving in the world of
devotion and Pleasure.
Euphoria heightens my yearning.
Your virility penetrates my voracious pussy
and I wrap my legs around you
keeping our bodies interlocked everlastingly
inside me every love seed of yours satiates my womb
I scream my bliss.
You sway my being with your dominant thrusts
driving me feral and taking me into a reverie of ecstasy.
We turn along the vertigo of glee,
and in a trance of enjoyment,
my contractions hold you tight inside me.
Trembling, shivering, sweating, Climaxing
and soaking in our nectars
I hold on to your embrace for the infinity
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge Season 8 by Master Ktulu.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 13 entries
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Delectable Reverie
This piece tugged hard and awakened everything dormant
While I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: my wet garden- also- prowess to penetrate
This quite the interesting read for I usually capitalize certain words for emphasis and notice You did similar with *Lion* also *Sultan* but did not do with *master* but capitalization on *Pleasure* also *Climaxing* after *sweating,*- which is not life threatening unless did with intent then that works- Line 2- we have all the eternity- looked like *the* might be added for after reading - may not need- wanted to run that by You
I'm making a mention on many writes-- As one of the judges, I'll mention what I notice but I don't like to butcher another person's work- I'm not a poetic guru and will never claim to be- this is just a personal note: so I understood what You meant and enjoyed the Journey
I'm not picky whether there is punctuation or not as long as I don't get lost in the words and lose my place~Everybody has his or her own style preference so I take that in consideration I did notice an extra space between *and* also *taking* in line 7 from the bottom up-
*driving me feral and taking.....just wanted to bring to Your attention- it did not feel intentionally put- me being a Libra- that stands out regarding balance also consistency The only other thing with this beauty of a write is the *p* word- Your entire peace has a different energetic feel and the *pussy* word woven in was like nails on a chalkboard in that line- only because of the sensuality-passion heightened and then Wham- but just an opinionI won't write a novel of a comment this time but in summary
Magnificent pre-write entered ~
Challenge Matrix:
spelling/grammar/punctuation- 18
presentation/creativity- 18
how well you handled the challenge-20
"grab me" effect (how much did we enjoy reading this piece)-18
overall-20
For a total of 94 points
Sensual images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Hope to read more...
Best wishes to You in the challenge Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This was direct and hot. I liked it, but it seemed a bit cliched for me and God knows I have written some real cliched pieces myself. I thought you painted a really vivid picture and I applaud you for that.
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Very sexy write. You did a wonderful job here. Thank you for the entry
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no beating around the bush here, you really know how to grab the readers with the beginning and hold them spellbound to the end. i like the way you flirt with the lines of sensual and hardcore. very well written.
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This is sensational! Imagery you so creatively use dances with desire upon the senses, leaving one kinda buckled in the corrner
You are an excellent erotica writer for sure. So passionate in your expression and seductive in your creativity. Excellent!
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