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Shakes An Angry Fist At The Sky

Across the long baron plains of North America,
Stands the native's camp in their hundreds,
With the beautiful feathers waving high,
And beaded tassels, trophies and decors.

Standing there under the great northern star,
Enjoying the warm breeze on her weathered face,
Her long ebony locks dancing,

The saddened face and tears of pain.

 

Her tears are burnt away by the blazing sun,

The braids in her hair of crimson and turquoise,

Carved beads with profession and attention to detail,

Flamboyant colours standing out in the shadows.

 

Wearing a soft suede dress with tassels,

Made from thick buffalo hide with ragged seems,

And holding a braid of long black hair in her hand,

And not loosening her grip at all.

 

Staring into the sunset of wild vivid colours,

The wondrous colours that tell her story,

And the brilliance of the blazing reds and oranges,

Standing there with the emotional anger in her eyes.

 

Not knowing what life may blow through the whispering winds,

Perhaps a new partner after the time for mourning ends,

For she is the one they named: -

"Shakes An Angry Fist At The Sky"...

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Inspired by the prompt given in the contest - "Shakes An Angry Fist At Sky" and by the amazing film "Dances with wolves"

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  • Blueskywonder
    November 4, 2008

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    I am curious, to know why she was named so. Native american tribes revered nature. Maybe, angry sky shakes fist at white man's lie

    I really liked the imagery to this piece and felt you really took us into the moment. Great Write


  • upperworld06
    August 19, 2008
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    awesome, i love the last line. good job and good luck


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    an enjoyable read, and very reminiscent of the movie Dances With Wolves...a favorite of mine. Rich imagery throughout, a very enjoyable read on a topic dear to my heart.
    Rory


  • Charley-
    February 16, 2008

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    Nice work

    Hello there and thanks for entering reading your piece i have to agree was moving and very creative thanks for sharing and best of luck to you


  • Thedamned77
    February 12, 2008

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    I'll be honest, when I first started reading this I thought it was strange, but as I read on, I really liked it. This was my favorite part:

    Staring into the sunset of wild vivid colours,
    The wondrous colours that tell her story,
    And the brilliance of the blazing reds and oranges,
    Standing there with the emotional anger in her eyes

    The imagery and words are just beautiful. I especially liked how you tied the name in, too. Very creative. Thank you for entering.


  • Danna Hobart
    February 6, 2008
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    I really like the direction the prompt took you in. Thank you for entering.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 24, 2008
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    WOW! WOW!

    Phoenix! you gogirl! i loved this! this is so well done, full of imagery nice flow. great work!


    • Passionate Phoenix
      January 24, 2008
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      thank Rich! I'm really pleased with this write. I put a lot of effort into it, and I really hope the judge likes it. I know talking about Indians and Native Americans is not everyone's idea of topics to talk about. Especially with so much conflict in their time. many thanks for your lovely comment xxx

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