No towers now to show the way to the sky.
A shoreline bright with fireflies of light.
Ocean stretches its open arms wide to
enfold the city of cities, Big Apple.
Waves wash away detritus of giant's force,
little waves lap against a tide so strong
it reaches beyond infinity, into forever.
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Contest by penman.
525 points, ended January 24, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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This isn't a style I'd usually consider effective, but the way you write is entrancingly beautiful and complex beyond the form you utilise.
"Waves wash away detritus of giant's force,
little waves lap against a tide so strong
it reaches beyond infinity, into forever."
You know, this is the exact way I felt when I was actually in Manhattan a few weeks ago. I don't know where you're from or if you've been to the City... but gods, this describes looking at Manhattan from the shores of the Hudson perfectly.
Awesome write, & good luck in the contest!
-Cristina
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A brilliant poet you are. Hope to know you better
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soooooooooo beautiful! love the imagery...best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha
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this is such a beautiful write that captures romanc within your words i loved this well done and best of luck
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This is so serene and has a touch of romance about it. Best wishes mum in this contest... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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