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Head above water

Back and forth
along a highway
of transparent thoughts

drifting in time ~

countless moments
flood existence
as life's whirlwind of tears

becomes an ocean of reality.

I learn to swim
but it's hard to breathe on the surface

                                   sometimes...

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  • penman gold member
    January 24, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Sometimes heeping your head above water is about all one has energy for... beautifully penned sweets... goodluck in this contest

    Karen


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    this is powerfully written from the picture and i love how your words brng it to life in my mind best of luck