I've grown tired of this place. I've grown accustomed to your brainwashing. I've grown sick of being lied to, being held back because of your fear, being resented by those that judge, being forced to live as someone I'm not. I've grown furious at you and at him. I've grown in pain of not knowning how to talk. I've grown away from you. I've grown to believe that there is a better life there than here. I've grown into the man you were afraid I'd become. I've grown into my father with a better head on my shoulders. I've grown up Mom but I love you anyway.
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Can you sense the feeling I was trying to portray?
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I love this piece because I can relate to it, but I think that you should end your lines where you put a comma or a period because it would make it flow a lot better...
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WOW. Really powerful and intense.
Emotions were clearly shown as you hid the dark messages cleverly.
Thanks and best of luck
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I felt as if you were a man who was no longer going to allow others to control him. That you had risen above their influence,wanted to escape, to become your own person. It felt liberating to me. Honest, but not resentful. You were ready to be free.
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Wow, this is a strong message you included in your poem.
I don't want what else to say.
This poem really speaks for itself.
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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