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Glass rose

I hand a single rose to you
And tell you that I
Will love you until the day
It withers and it dies

You look at me in wonder
How can it be?
Is our love meaningless
Can I discard it so easily

But I tell you to look deeper
At what I've handed you
And you'll understand
My words are honest and true

I see the smile grace your lips
As you realise the rose is glass
And as long as it remains unbroken
Our love is meant to last

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    March 31, 2008

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    Thank you for sharing this with me. Best of luck in the contest.

    ♥
    whisper


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    IT is so nice to use prewrites in contest like this - giving them new life and opportunity for others to read your words. Thanks for sharing these lovely lines.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    That was just beautiful. Of course i dont think i would of mentioned the last stanza or re word it..its a beautiful piece but the mention of it being a glass rose, well the way it written sounded a little off. I loved it.

    Passions
    good luck to you in the contest


  • Poesing
    March 15, 2008

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    The fragile-ness (is that a word?) of the glass rose and the delicacy of love is well preserve in this poem.
    Good job.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Such a tender romantic poem, beautifully penned. A wonderful description of love. All the best in the contest with it

  • MightyBoosh
    March 15, 2008

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    This is lovely, its gentle, romantic and the general semantic field of love comes across brilliantly. It flows wonderfully and i love the 'rose is glass'. It makes love seem all the more fragile...easy to break. It also makes us wonder about the relationship of these people in the poem..obviously tender.

    I loved it.

    xx


  • love my jose luis
    February 5, 2008

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    I like this piece, it kind of made me think of Beauty and the Beast you know the rose in the glass case, I know that it's different but I liked it non-the-less, I don't know how to write that word, but I think that people understand what I am trying to say. Good luck in my contest.
    ~Maria


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    January 24, 2008
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    This is a very gentle piece you hav penned marc its great


  • Emosie Vloei
    January 24, 2008

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    Nice

    Avery nice a suttle piece here.Such strong emotion packed into these few lines.I love the imagery and flow.I could see the glass rose as she stared at it with love in her eyes.

  • Aisades
    January 24, 2008
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    Beautiful

    This piece is really original. That's really nice for a change.

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