I used to chat with an evil one,
he would lie and do bad things,
his best friend is the devil,
an awful feeling that guy brings.
He spreads hate and condemns,
a rock in his hand he would use,
he'd hurt another with his words,
he has been known to abuse.
I was lucky to get away,
for his nature is not play,
he would kill another human being,
if innocent he'd do it anyway.
Watch out for the evil one,
he's one that lurks around,
he acts like the sweetest guy
but on the inside evil is found.
Author notes
"I apologize for being human"
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Comments
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There are predators around every corner. Always good to be careful. This piece was good, but lacked a real poetic depth. Thank you for your entry!
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This is a good piece, the rhyme and flow are consistent throughout. I like the theme,sweet on the outside and evil within. Very well penned, good luck
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Hmm..
Not quite what i was looking for, but i can somehow relate to the person you describe..its hard to capture that evil and reign it in sometimes.... so as not to harm the innocent...
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