He fell again,
skinned his spirit on the way down,
like a Phoenix he had rose from the ashes
of self destruction
only to stumble into his abyss of pain
and fall once more,
He fell again,
into the fires of his self created hell,
giving up on himself once again
believing the lies whispered from devils lips
eating at his very soul
and fall once more he did,
He fell again
as hands reached through time and space
trying to catch hold before he was devoured
by self loathing and pain,
fingers slipped through bloody grasp
and fall once more he did,
He fell again
and the world stopped breathing
as on bended knees we begged for mercy
to give him courage and strength to rise,
life's would be shed for his salvation
so he could stand once again
and fall again he did.
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This was well written. The first two lines were my favorite. Strong and kept you reading. Good use of repition with the title. Continue writing, please.
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"He fell again" is very effective as lead-in/refrain don't know about the phoenix metaphor a bit ckiched and overworked? yes/no? last stanza was the strongrest good writing job for fantasy hands reacing throuth time and space worked well thanks for sharing regards zaj
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well, this is quite a work in progress. the power of repetition in this gives such a strong image. a continual falling but still getting up to move on leaves me with knowing i can do it... i can fall and get up, but not without some help. wonderful job!
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Wonderful
Very creative and well expressed. I like the repetition. Gives it a very effective style.
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