chrisio by Amera at All poetry

I spent a day in silence
which really isn’t true

I spent a day in silence
while loving things anew

I spent a day in silence
I’ll tell you what I heard

I spent a day in silence
carnality was blurred

I spent a day in silence
a harp played in my soul

I spent a day in silence
I felt such self control

I spent a day in silence
love embraced my heart

I spent a day in silence
I left my cares behind

I loved my day of silence

with Jesus on my mind

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“chrisio” Is a Christian sabbatical or get away.

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Whoochi
January 27, 2008

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I truly have been meditating these days and these were beautiful inner serene thoughts....its always good to be silent and centered....Loved these calm soothing words....from my heart to yours Dollface! Best of luck!
Faeryn
January 26, 2008

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I shared this poem with one of my friends and she says it was very beautiful and relaxing. She sends you some clappies too.
micol
January 26, 2008

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Beautifully done. Simple, direct, yet lyrical and moving. The repeton not only ties the poem together but gains in power with each new discovery.

The only line that drew attention to itself was "embraced a love so kind," and that only because the "so" doesn't have a completer (so...that) and seems emptier, more a space-filler, than the other words in the poem.
- Amera
  January 26, 2008
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  Thank you Michael, I see what you mean. I changed that line to:
  "love embraced my heart". I deliberatly stayed away from mentioning Christ in a pronoun as I would have had to capitalize it thus giving away the last line.
- - micol
    January 26, 2008
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    thank you. I hesitated to say anything about a piece so clearly close to you; I like your revision, since it touches the 'heart' of the entire poem now.
Ellis
January 25, 2008
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Very restful, soothing, yet thought provoking.
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FransB
January 25, 2008
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A precious poem within a poem! I am updating my comments, and still think it is a 'precious' poem. I had this vision, that if you gave this poem to the 'lady looking out fron the window sill', she would have appreciated its contents. The repitition accentuates the contents of the lines thereafter. I also only read the lines without first reading the repitions, and that is why I view with poem as a 'poem within a poem'. You offer more than hope within this poem - I personally think that you have much endopathic understanding. Once again, thank you for participating. Frans
HaleyMary
January 24, 2008

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This is a beautiful write, Sis. I liked the repeating line of silence. It gave the poem a nice peaceful and spiritual feeling. Good luck in the contest.
Flamecaster
January 24, 2008
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love your words...good luck...
sunny day
January 24, 2008

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Such a peaceful getaway!!!!!!!
The peace and serenity felt from this verse is absolutely amazing. I love the repetition of the line, "I spent a day in silence". It made this all the more powerful in such a soft way. When one can spend a day with Jesus on their mind they will feel the inner peace that we are always looking for. It's so so beautiful. Thank you for sharing your gift once again through this masterpiece and best wishes in the contest. This is golden. Love you my friend, Joyce
capricornpoet
January 24, 2008
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Jesus
Soothing words, truly the prophet King follower,
he does talk when we listen in silence...
StarEyes
January 24, 2008

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What a beautiful read for the first one of the day! I love it. Such a peaceful read, and just kinda lends a lot of comfort to ones soul as they read! I don't think I have ever seen one written like this, but I truly enjoyed it!!

Best of luck in this contest!!

and love

Nyetta
Sue Cardwell
January 24, 2008

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You have created a sense of silence within your words.
This poem needs to be read slowly. The repeatition adds to the force of your words.

I enjoyed your experience..

Love Sue
penman
January 24, 2008
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Wonderful
A truly exquisite creation. So powerful and spiritual, best of luck in the contest.
Pure Thought
January 23, 2008

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This has a wonderful chanting measure to it. A beautiful Mantra, "I spent a day in Silence."
We should all do this, on the same day.
Faeryn
January 23, 2008
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Wow...this is pretty. You never cease to amaze me.
-Tay
amaranthine lover
January 23, 2008

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This is purely beautiful, Amera, like a church hymn or something. Lovely work here
LadyLavender
January 23, 2008

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Amera, its been awhile since reading your work. Of course, I always admire your talent. This is beautiful.
Ithica
January 23, 2008

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The repetition lends itself to the allusion of being alone with ones own thoughts while oblivious to the whirl of the world outside... A little one on one time with Jesus never hurt anyone as far as I know?
MJ Donnelly
January 23, 2008

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Oh, Amera dear, this is so beautiful. I have been on many such sabbaticals, and loved every one. You have such a beautiful mind my dear, and I am so glad that I met you here on AP.

Love, Michael.
PerVirtuous
January 23, 2008

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Very interesting format. I like the image and the format is impeccably done. You should do well in this contest.