Its pathetic really;
all these thoughts in my mind.
Still loving the one
I left behind.
But its not obsession
Never think that it is
I really loved you
and there's times i still want you.
But I'm ready to let go,
I will leave you alone.
Just let me thank you
for all the things that you've done.
That time I was hurting,
because I'd had a bad week...
you held me close to you
you complimented me.
You said I was pretty,
and I denied it.
You said it again
making sure I was listening.
All the times that you hugged me
holding me close.
Especially the last day I had with you.
You held me forever,
not letting me go.
Ill tell you now...
There's times i still feel that.
You told me everything would be ok...
with that voice that told me i could believe you.
You helped with my addiction
said you'd always be listening.
You told me I'd be back,
You said you cared...
and I think you still do,
but its hard for you to listen.
Because I said I love you...
such beautiful words!
but you treat them as if
I cursed you to hell...
I said I won't get in the way
I would move on
but your so focused on yourself
i guess you weren't listening.
I told you I'd be there if you ever needed me...
That promise still stands
I'll be here to hear you.
But you've lost my trust,
so don't expect anything...
That's what you wanted.
You should be happy!
A contest entry
- PREWRITES!!!!!! by Luminescence.
450 points, ended March 5, 2008, 69 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Break my heart and make me cry by God is my reality.
900 points, ended August 11, 2008, 79 entries
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Comments
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wow. This is just wow. Because I said I loved you, such beautiful words, but you treated them as if I condemned you to hell. That is just amazingly good. Excellent poems and good luck in the contest
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You have some gramitical errors that needs fixing... but besides that this was a wonderfull piece... so full of emotion and pain... Its great.
thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck,
~lumi


