From the reaches deep within
Pull together Satans grin
Plot and laugh and smirk and smile
Piece a puzzle oh so vile
Take the hand of someone loved
Play to hold and kiss and hug
Then so swift you let it drop
Emotions die, emotions stop
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Insanity Is Kinda Fun, Forgetting All Which You Have Done
Being Insane, Such Great Escape and Faulted Not For Others Fate
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Grip the child of which you hold
Then to scream the words untold
Emotions cease to come to play
And on the ground her body lay
For no emotion means no guilt
Theres no response to such blood spilt
And with that said there's no remorse
While laughing smuggly at her corpse
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Insanity Is Kinda Cool, Seeing As There Is No Rule
To Be Insane, As Stories Tell, Is To Create Ones Own Hell
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But of course Hell is fine by me
Seeing all that I do see
See the snap within my mind
Days before it's someones time
To see the cause and see the means
To see an outcome to hear the screams
To simply do what must be done
Unraveling what has become
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Insanity It Kinda Hurts, To Come Back To And See My Work
Emotions Pour Back Into Me, As I View The Product Of Insanity
~*~
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But then I do it all again
Laugh and talk and gloat my friend
Looking you straight in the eye
All while knowing, How You Die
Wait for you to turn away
Then from my wrist remove the blade
Swiftly pounce in gleed attack
Start to laugh while you fight back
You struggle hard, I am annoyed
So I pull out a favored toy
Pistol whipped you stop your fight
What no struggle? Not tonight?
But alas I've become mad
For you have failed to make me glad
Blood falls from your mouth, it streams
I, dissappionted, heard no scream
Hearing nothing stresses more
So I drag you limp across the floor
Place up in perfect pose
And start my art, my marble chose
Insisions made so preicise
The trace of blood makes it nice
A bit of lace, remove the smile
Beautied true in senseless style
Eyes they pierce to show the hate
But no emotion, what a waste
A quick collect I'll make of this
And these replaced by satin swish
Paint the wall, red of course
To make a backing for my corpse
No, not a corpse, no not now
Now it's art as I've shown you how
Remove a limb to make it stick
Inpressionism, torso ripped
Muscle moved to set a start
And skin been slashed, it's body art
~*~
Insanity Is Kinda Nice, Beauitful At It's Own Price
And Though Insane I May Be, There Is None Other Can Do Like Me
~*~
Author notes
>] Tee Hee, Gets a bit long but it was a fun write.
A contest entry
- The Alphabet Quickies, 10 entries, Any Style! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended January 24, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - WANTED: CONTEST WHORES by Poetry In Motion.
600 points, ended January 30, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Outstanding , has to be my favorite poem so far, because of the emotion that was so easily explained, the mental images you put in my head i could see the agony of this.
You are a very beautiful poet, with vast talent!
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yay for dismemberment!
hope I spelled that right but w/e
I kinda liked it, it very much appealed to my own sense of very dark humor. And I so very much like dark, gory humor. Problem is.....that not many other people do. And it is absolutely refreshing to see that someone else may not be exactly 'screwed on right'.
Anyways...thankies this wonderfully dark, somewhat funny, and brilliantly descriptive piece here...clappies to follow deary x]
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lol this one doesn't flow in some parts but i like it. it gets kinda annoying not being able to find contests focused at stuff like this, it's fun beig the loose screw =P
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Wow
This kept my full attention all the while, it was awesome to hear about your insanity.
Yes indeed how odd it is,
To hear a tale of maddened gal,
The sadism, horror of this miss,
Is absolutely unbelieveab...el.
Awesome indeed!
Cheers, Joshua
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Gorgeous , you little sadistic female. Straight into a straightjacket for you!
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Why Thank you >] lol I've always wanted a jacket of my own =p
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Yes
This piece fell too flat for me. After the first half, when that second section came in, it felt boring for me and I couldn't stay focused - you didn't make the first 1/2 of the 2nd 1/2 strong enough...
I also felt that the bridge/refrain type thing felt too cheesy and took away from the overall tone of the contest... a word even like "kinda" took away from the intensity of the write.
the ending, however, I liked. I thought it was a good idea and creative. Your rhyming also showed potential, along with some imagery and some of your phrasing.
For next time, I would work on constant imagery, and a strong focus of the theme.
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yes.
I loved the rhyme. The content of the peice does need a bit of work though - and after a while, it became a drag which is usually an issue with longer poems. You need to get a way to gkue your readers to the words and keep them interested throughout.
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Awesome. This is great. You almost lost me halfway through but you immidiatly pulled me back in further then before. Very well done, thank you for entering.
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Good dark write!
I loved the way your piece flowed and the dark journey I went on while reading. These 2 lines broke the flow but still good and dark. If it were me I would change them but that is just me. All have opinions and you know the saying of that. lol!
Insanity Is Kinda Cool, Seeing As There Is No Rule
To Be Insane, Like Myself, Is To Create Ones Own Hell
Pistol whipped you stop your fight
Your unconsious, tell me why...
Wishing you inspirations to come your way this day...
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lol i fixed it kinda lol I revised those two lines anyway. Thanks for the fresh eye!! ♥ ♥ ♥
Katie
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wow, the horror content was absolutely AMAZING! It made the poem even more powerful!
The piece flows awesomely-
Great job
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The music...
the cacadence...
the flow of words...
they make it so beautiful...so lyrical...so powerful
I wish it were not gory....that horrifies me!!!
Galaxy2
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wow this is amazing-- reminds me of a quote "i do not suffer from insanity, i enjoy every minute of it"
this is perfecto
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This seems to me more than a quickie - lots of writing here, wow! I is certainly for insanity here, alright. Lots to ponder about in these lines.
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Very dark imagery and great form, lovely entry. Thank you Hugs, Bunny
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CRAZY!!!!
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