Music flows about my ears
Shards of golden noise skip
Through fields of half-cooled lava
(my hair)
I entwine my heart with the music
Not letting the emotions cease
Always feeling, caring, twisting
(with the music)
I giggle as my infatuation for harmonics
Overflows my capacity for love
And I fall over with joy in my heart
(dance)
Some think estacy is imposible
But for me music is all it takes
For me to float to the sky
(On the notes of music)
(lovehatemusicclamorgoldsilverwhiteblackeatstarveoppisitethesame)
(ilovemusic)
Author notes
I am Vivien Gayle (last name my middle name, I'm not going to tell anybody my last name over the internet...) and how 'bout I can be your daughter who's always listening to her iPod...
A contest entry
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Please Critique! I love critical comments!
Comments
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IT SUCKED.
Just Kidding
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I do not find the last two lines to be necessary, it only repeats really what was previously stated.
Other than that, a lovely poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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i really enjoyed all the imagery! this is a good write you have written! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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GREAT JOB
THE NOTES MOVED UPON THE PAGE EXPRESSING WELL THE SONG OF YOUR HEART. THANK YOU FOR ENTERING YOUR POEM MY DAUGHTER WHO'S ALWAYS LISTENING TO HER iPod. I DO APPOLOGIZE FOR THE MISUNDERSTANDING. PLEASE PLACE YOUR USER NAME IN YOUR RESPONSE TO MY COMMENT. THANK YOU
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My username is Dancing the Rumba. Thank you for the great comment!
V
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Good right. Showed your emotion for the music. My favorite part was:
Some think estacy is imposible
But for me music is all it takes
For me to float to the sky
(On the notes of music)
Good luck in the contest -
Great job expressing your love affair with music! The parenthesis were fun, too. Thanks for entering my contest!
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well i LOVE it! i also love the picture and this was a great! Music rocks! Great job!
~Ruth~
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