Quiet is your voice in rising light,
this gentle hush makes tender touch soar,
where naked rush will burn ever bright,
quiet is your voice in rising light.
Caresses causes souls to excite,
when each kiss is brighter than before.
Quiet is your voice in rising light,
this gentle hush makes tender touch soar.
Lilt of lovers' song in souls do seep,
which stays till the call of early morn.
Your warmth so close to me I will keep;
lilt of lovers' song in souls do seep.
Passion does not leave us in soft sleep,
such romance our bodies does adorn.
Lilt of lovers' song in souls do seep,
which stays till the call of early morn.
Author notes
Kiran
A contest entry
- Invite Only - My Favorite Rhymers by Frodofan.
600 points, ended January 31, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a lovely triolet form here full of smiles, i am not so much into forms right now, writing them i mean, i do love reading them though
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Outstanding
This poem is full of great imagery. This has great flow and a sophisticated form. I liked your choice of language and the lyrical feel of this poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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Bravo
Ah, a double triolet!! Excellent, we get twice our money's worth--so to speak!!-- wonderful, again, I loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Kiran, What to say again for another triolet of love that came from your magnificent pen. So much has been said for this one already and I have to agree with all that got here before I did. Thank you for sharing the gift of your pen once again with all of us. This is absolutely beautiful and I wish you the best in the contest. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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special!
I love the romance in your work. This is special.
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It is always my pleasure to click on your name as i know with certainty that i will be assured of a wonderful read I have yet to meet anyone who can surpass you when it comes to love poetry Excellent
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you are so incredible at writing love poetry in form like this. this makes me sigh... just dreaming about it one day.
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The triolet is my favorite of all forms and you write them so well..this is beautiful..
"Lilt of lovers' song in souls do seep,
which stays till the call of early morn."
Interesting with the nine syllable lines. I really like that.
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As always, very sweet, loving, and passionate. I'm glad you could enter. I haven't seen any triolets in a while.
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I love a well written Triolet as this one is. The repeating lines must be composed well to amplify the impact of the write. You did this very well lending softness and fluidity to the piece.
Love,
Amera♥
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