Like a bridge it has two sides…
2 steps left, 3 to the right…
My heart is raging like roaring tides…
Confusion building, tension so tight…
Both ends offer a gentle hand…
Close my eyes; Dreams are haunting…
What to do? Where do I stand?
Could all of this be anymore taunting?
Trapped inside the hour glass…
Stuck in the middle; hands on the wall…
With no more pride, dignity, or class…
I subside in the sands as I fall...
Tell me, have I written this demise?
No one in sight to pin all my troubles...
Struggling and twisting, I try to rise...
Am I forever trapped, in two glass bubbles?
A contest entry
- Pimp up my prewrites by leander.
650 points, ended February 21, 2008, 108 entries
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You have captured a steady flow within the words of this poem, and definately kudos to you for an excellent rhymescheme that you have used
Perfect rhyme is something I don't come across with that often on the pages of Allpoetry.
The whole concept of this poem is pretty good, though an hourglass might come a bit as a cliched thing, in this case it isn't since you pulled the object totally out of the box in which it's used normally (time).
Thank you for entering this poem into this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
an awsome poem
we must break the glass to become who we want to be...release ourselves from chains, conquore that which keeps us locked up...nice poem again
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WOW!!
"kvwriter" totally stole all the words straigh from my mind. Now im not sure what to say lol
I do love the hourglass theme.
Being trapped in the middle really sucks. Been there before..
But everything can go both ways..you can keep getting tossed from each end to the other for the rest of your life until you break the glass and go where you want.
Great write hun!
L-R-P
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thank you for those words...I truly appreciate it.
Scott -
Well-written poem that truly lends brightened light to your struggles, the way you're feeling. Words woven just right have a way of doing that, revealing what is deep. Tension, trauma, circumstances and situations, stress, and more, all have a way of wearing on us. This can come out via nightmares and others problems. I don't know where you are, exactly, or where you've been, but I do know you have a future if you'll just think it and believe it. Worry only harms us. Practice breathing and just being in the moment. Live in the moment, now, and don't think behind or ahead. Just be.
And keep writing. This is a way of getting it out, said, released and is healing. Just be patient. And pen on. It is healing and you'll find this out. That's what I'm doing and it is working. Best we can do sometimes in life, but if it's our best, then it's always good enough. Be strong! And, yes, you do have a friend. Nobody should have to be alone. Sorry for what you're going through. Wish there was more I could do to help. Just hang in there. "This too shall pass," my grandmother always used to say. Though she's in another realm, parted ways, these words have not been proved wrong yet. And never will be.--Kel
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