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The Dragon and the Elf - a sad story

This is a tale that has never been told,
a story of love and a dragon’s throne.
He married an elf and made her his own
for his love for her could not be controlled.
So hear this sad tale from the days of old;
The two were together, never alone.
Then in came a wind a giant cyclone,
shaking the rafters; their little house rolled.

Hear the sad story of how the elf died.
If she held her breath, before it started
and turned her head from the dragon’s backside;
he wouldn’t now be so broken hearted.
The dragon was sad and O how he cried,
‘twasn’t his breath; she died when he farted.

 

 

 

Author notes

Petrarchan sonnet:
The Italian sonnet is divided into two sections by two different groups of rhyming sounds. The first 8 lines is called the octave and rhymes:
a b b a  a b b a
The remaining 6 lines is called the sestet and can have either two or three rhyming sounds, arranged in a variety of ways:

c d c d c d
c d d c d c
c d e c d e
c d e c e d
c d c e d c
The exact pattern of sestet rhymes (unlike the octave pattern) is flexible. In strict practice, the one thing that is to be avoided in the sestet is ending with a couplet (dd or ee), as this was never permitted in Italy, and Petrarch himself (supposedly) never used a couplet ending; in actual practice, sestets are sometimes ended with couplets.

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  • Rovingone gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    I needed some comic moments to get me started this day. Really puts some lightness in the heart these. Terriffic!


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    < ----- lane rolling around on the ground laughing


    love, lane


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    January 31, 2008

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    A master piece to me, to be able to stick to such a form yet tell such a tale and rhyme to the rules so well

    Awesome


    Cindy


  • micol
    January 31, 2008

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    Okay, I'm pretty sure Petrarch didn't have this in mind when he developed the form for his poetic tributes to his beloved.

    Too bad, he might have had more fun in life.

    You've taken an elegant form and bit by bit, transformed it to a vehicle for humor, culminating--as it should--with the final word, which not only completes the rhyme and meter but also the transformation of the poem. This is delightful from beginning to end.


  • anaisnais
    January 31, 2008

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    Lmho. hehe! How clever you are to fit such great story to form, you truly are a master of poetry! I am in awe of your writes! Well done


  • Ellis gold member
    January 25, 2008

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    This is so embarrassing
    Made me hide my TV screen
    Till my wife left the room
    To go get our pooper broom

    Tiki Cat


    • Amera gold member
      January 26, 2008
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      I love your comments. This one made me spew coffee out of my nose.


  • HaleyMary
    January 24, 2008

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    lol. I wasn't really expecting that. I started reading and was all sad and then was surprised at the end and laughed. Wonderful poetic form, as always. Keep writing.


  • penman gold member
    January 24, 2008
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    Wow!

    No that is some story. And what an ending. You should take up writing children's tales.


  • sunny day
    January 24, 2008

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    Amera, OMG!!!!!!! You really got me at the end here with this one. That wasn't what I was expecting. You are truly the queen of sonnets and this is absolutely the best. You have me LMAO right now. I just went from laughing to serenity back to laughing in three short poems from you. You brought me into your world through the imagery you displayed. Your rhythm and rhyme are brilliant as always. You never disappoint me. In fact I am always in awe of your writing. Thank you for sharing another masterpiece with all of us. Remember to stay down wind now! Love you my friend, Joyce

    P.S. I just read your reply to passim here and kudos to you for standing your ground. To have written this in couplets would have detracted from it. Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!


  • passim silver member
    January 23, 2008
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    Please read the rules.

    • Amera gold member
      January 23, 2008
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      I removed it!
      I followed these posted rules:
      Rules: The obvious apply, but also:

      MUST RHYME

      MUST HAVE GOOD METER

      NO SWEARING, NO CUTTING, NO BASHING, NO SMUT - IT WILL BE DQ'D.

      If you’re referring to Cyril Fletcher’s octosylabic couplets, I prefer to not write like him as he knew nothing about controlled meter.


  • Faeryn
    January 23, 2008
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    poor elf, awesome poem!
    -Tay


  • capricornpoet
    January 23, 2008

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    funny

    A dragon with a flatulence problem, should of given him mints..poor elf..whimsical ..comically sad ...


  • StarEyes
    January 23, 2008

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    You never cease to amaze me with your sonnets girl! This is amazing!! You have such a great talent telling stories in your poetry!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Kiran silver member
    January 23, 2008

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    I loved this, funny and just so brilliantly written. Well done.


  • PerVirtuous
    January 23, 2008
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    The Dragon's to blame so it seems
    for blowing her through the housebeams.
    But, now just ask yourself
    if you'd been the Elf
    would you feed the beast 12 pots of beans?

    Funny and profound. The best use of a stuffy old Petrarchan Sonnet I have ever seen. (I just hope it wasn't a wet one.)


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    Melvin the dragon is laughing and crying
    At the picture that now his mind's eye is spying
    Oh pity the elf as she fried in that way
    Now dragons wear fire-proof pants to this day!

    You are utterly mad!!
    Love it
    great
    !

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