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Tired-p/w

You call me on the Phone
Even when I’m not home
You always want to talk
Leave me…....please don’t stalk

When I try to hide
You’ll show up by my side
I need some space
But you’re always in my face

You always complain
Please won’t you refrain?
I am tired of the constant nag
Your mouth I want to gag

My ears are tired
You get me so fired
I am in emotional distress
You want me as your mistress

I do care
But you’re always in my hair
It’s always the same things
Like a mosquito that sings

I don’t know what to do
Cause God knows I do love you
I just need some time
Before I’ll say you’ll be mine

I wish I had a magic wand
To make you understand
Please just go away
And come back anther day

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Written November 14th, 2003

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  • theDARK1 gold member
    November 16, 2003
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    i see there is another contender for the top prize in this contest. a very bad poem indeed. good luck in the contest, but ifeel you won't need too much.

  • Goss98
    November 14, 2003
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    "I am in emotional distress
    You want me as your mistress "

    "I wish I had a magic wand
    To make you understand "

    Woof. Bad rhyme. And it doesn't sound very threatening, for someone who's mad.


  • November 14, 2003
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    umm,... yeah
    reminds me of when my mom would put extra water in the condensed chicken noodle soup to make us think there was more than there was... this poem tastes like that...


  • Todd Roswell
    November 14, 2003
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    now this is pretty terrible.