In this world so true and frail
Life runs it's petty course
Disregarded, thrown away
Treasured when lifted from abyss
I don't want to be like you
I don't want to treasure life
I don't want to throw it away
I don't want to be something special
I just want to be OK
Ok...?
I once said to be unique was for posers
Try to find beauty in being out the ordinary
Petals falling from eyes in love
For trying to find that special someone
I don't
want to be
like you
Staring into my ceiling
Staring into my own mind
Staring into what I wish
Were your glimmering eyes
Staring into my selfishness
Me, just me.
Saying, speaking, preaching to quit acting
Walking, running, falling from you
Screaming, yelling, finally fucking up
I want to be
I -don't- want to be
I want to be
Like you
I want to be unaffected by what -they- would think
I want these petals to be relieved
I want these dreams to stop haunting me
I want my ghosts to stop defining me
I want to have the courage to be the outcast
Don't want to care what anyone thinks
Want to hold you in my arms
Don't want you to feel a thing
I want to be
Myself
Author notes
I wrote this poem with the intent of, well, "I don't want to be like you". I just wanted that to be the theme of the poem, and I think it turned rather well, had a nice climax, and even a bit of metaphor in there, so I'm happy with it.
Please tell me whatever you want
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The way you have written this gives it an appealing power and kept me reading with interest all the way to the end, even though at my age I can't relate easily to the feelings expressed. Good write.
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amazing
totally relateable in all circumstances.
well written and descriptive.
kudos.
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a strong need to keep one as one is, is something that makes us human, this poem expresses in depth that need,as well as something other emotions that come in strong and clear. keep it flowing
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ohhh thats wonderful!!
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nice. I want to be myself too.
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awsome
i like this poem keep up with the wicked work. -
you are you and if that is not good enough for people then i guess it is not important enough for them to know the real you. for all they know they have these thoughts just like you but they never even give you a chance.
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I enjoyed reading this, I liked the thoughts that were put into this, and can associate with that feeling...
Well written.
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thought provoking
Being an outcast is not something you "want to have the courage to be." You either are or you aren't. If given the choice, most outcasts wouldn't want to be. It is not necessarily a good thing either. It's not necessarily unique or romantic. It can be just downright painful. Glorifying it enters it into the realm of "misunderstood genius," and they are technically not outcasts.
Don't get me wrong, it's important to stand up for what you believe in and feel is right, and not be afraid to go against convention. And to be unrestrained creatively and artistically.
Even if you tried to be someone else you couldn't. When we are "like others," we are exhibiting different aspects of a nature that is entirely human.
Only we ourselves hold the key to the combination of traits that makes us unique. Belonging is not necessarily a bad thing, it just depends on who or what you belong with or to. -
Very well written! So many people can relate to this in many ways. Fantastic write and beautiful emotion.
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This was very good. I think it's something a lot of people can relate and have felt at least once in their life.
You penned it with good use of emotion and you did so well
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You need to learn the possessive form of the indefinite pronoun. Also, it's a good idea to avoid the word "abyss" in poetry. It provokes laughter, which I'm sure was not your intention. Good luck.
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The words in this poem seem to fit together so well, each one it seems is in the place it's meant to be and the flow that is created is perfect in my eyes. At the same time you tackled an important issue, we all want to be ourselves but often it is very very hard. I especially love the second to last paragraph and the line ' I want to have the courage to be the outcast'. I have the courage to be the outcast and so do others that I know but it's not the easiest path in the world, being who you are is hard. This is a well written poem and is just plain awesome.
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Amazing
If one person is his or herself they can't be put into a label. Because labels are for those who want to be and are not. They are for people who are trying to hard to be soemthing and not simply being themselves. Sometimes if you just be your self you find that others want to be like you and other times you find that you are alone. But either way just keep in mind people have to learn to accept you either way cause you can't change who you truly are.
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If your need to be yourself isn't strong enough for you to actually do it, you'll never be happy. You don't necessarily have to be an outcast to be yourself. What happens, happens. Just go with the flow. Good write.
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Speechless.
This is sheer brilliance. And, definitely, so many people can relate! So amazing, I don't know what else to even say.
I wish I could give so many more applauses.
ITNC.
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I like this better
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Curse you and your rules!!
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maybe enter something in your own style instead?
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Very nice write ^_^
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In the world as it stands today, who in their right mind would wish to be anything like everybody else? Excellent write you have here . And keep being an individual, it is the only way to truly live. ~Bret~
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Thanks for the concern! Don't worry about me, though, I'll be fine. It's the learning to be oneself that's the hard part. I mean... self discovery is hard.
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i'm like a fly on a wall
i will buzz in your ear
you will try swat me but alas
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Sure you do. Because i am epic pwnage nub. Can'7 b3a7 a 1337 hax0r like i am
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lol, wut?
Who the hell are you?
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interesting
very different, and hints at a contradictory nature. not very often people slam uniqueness and want to be different at the same time...i liked it
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There's nothing more important than just being yourself. ^^ Loved the poem.
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An interesting write. The difference between wanting and being is what you become and whether you can stand the heat once that's who you are. Happy trails
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This poem is very good. I loved it. I feel the same way. It is pretty easy to read, which is important to me. I don't do well with poems that have big words that are confusing. You did a great job. Keep it up.
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This is amazing. I can relate..it's a really moving poem and I like that the structure changes so it's not repetitive.Anyways..I guess the point I'm making is..you freaking rule!!
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this was a great write. you are an awesome poet.
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Wow....
This is great. I was totally considering entering Rocio's contest inspired by this...But after reading this...Nothing my writer's block brain could every compare. This is fabulous. I love how it had a climax. That was just... awesome.
Wonderful job!
~Butterfly~
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I knew you had talent this is something.. your intelligent beyond me that is for sure. I love what you said and how you said it.. God Bless
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I am going to try to spotlight this because it is so amazingly written that it amazed me.
I think many of us can relate to this, not wanting to be like anyone else, but trying to be one self, but then again either way there is always someone out there that IS like you so doesn't work.
Anyways, this was really good.
And you've given me a new idea for a contest (wanna be co-judge?)
..Simply Me♥
P.S God Bless you
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Co-Judge? Sure, sounds fun. I've never done it before, so it sounds like a great opportunity. ^^
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oook.I made a contest and added you as a co-judge.
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wow wow
I cant belive no one has commented this yet. I think every one feels this way. I like the way you write. Great job.
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