Shy I am and not so tall,
I loved a girl behind a wall.
Ink words on a bouncing ball
Up it rockets, down it falls
When this blockade erodes away
Forever with you I said i'd stay
A violent storm fell 10 years deep
I crawled up a triumph heap
When I got to the top,
I heard an echo..."I love you not"
My vision infinitly clearer
Infront of me a crying mirror.
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Um, whoa and awsome! , that wasa freaking sweet write, well penned!
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To reach for the brass ring to find it is tarnished with lies can hurt to the core. Good expression of emotions.
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smooth flow
I really like the soft rythem it had, and i like rhyme so yeah i liked that too
.. but it was really deep. I like it alot. It goes with how I see somethings right now in my life. I really like it.
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I like the flow and everything
Goes to show how you can't trust internet relationships
You never know if they're true or not =/
Beautiful write =)
It didn't feel very forced at all.
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nice! like it.
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Oh! This is just so touching! I love it!!
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I wish I could write like this. This was really good and I really liked it.
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AWW! this one made me sad-but i still loved it!
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Sadly this brings out the hardest parts of internet relationships. I myself have been down that road also and I'v had the same reactions. If this is personal I wish you the best of luck, otherwise this is a wonderful poem, you put so much emotion into your work its amazing.
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Good write. I see your point on commenting about my poem. Internet love or romance is an interesting phenonomon. Maybe I love too easily.
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Hummm this is a good write, the light hearted feel about it says this is a poem of strength.
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I have had my share of Internet Romance. That's actually how I met my husband... through a sort of... Limewire site. (Downloading music.) This was a sweet piece, is it personal?
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nice work.. i love it! especially the last part.
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I love your poetry. Keep writing! I feel like this poem all the time.
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very nice read..
the write flows with the ending word
not too much of a heartbreak from the imagery but more like wiser after such an experience...
perhaps faithfulness is something illicitly rare nowadays...
well that would be taken in another perspective hehe
~*cheers
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