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The Busy Piggies

This lil' piggy went to Toys R Us
to buy you a brand new toy...

and this lil' piggy went to the grocers
for yummy ice cream to enjoy.

This lil' piggy went to Hallmark
to buy you a "get well" card...

and this lil' piggy went to the pet store
for a puppy to play in the yard.

And this last lil' piggy, well...

He rounded up the other four,
to sing and dance a funny jig...

so you can forget about the ouchies,
while giggling at the five lil' pigs.

Author notes

I know this may be to juvenile for a second grader, but thought maybe the simplicity and message within would make him smile. I also have a daughter in the second grade who has inspired many of my children's writes, so feel free to drop by to read. If you come across something you think more suitable you're welcome to use it, as I'm not entering for recognition or points. I love the idea of this contest and hope he's better soon.

"I mommyof2, hereby allow Mackerth to use my poem for
the intended purpose".
mommyof2

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  • Frogzter gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    I'm with the piggie that went to Toys R' us! I love that place...lol I did not find this at all juvenile but rather imaginative and thoughful! Your compassion for this young man I am sure will be greatly appreciated and treasured for many years to come! Blessings and best wishes,

    Frogz~


  • mystic-angel gold member
    January 31, 2008
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    This is wonderful. Simple and funny too. A lovely read. Well written and good luck in the contest.


  • Tarja
    January 25, 2008

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    Awwww HOW SWEET! I agree with your author's notes that it is a bit juvenile but that's what made it so adorable and awesome! I love it. Totally reminded me of being a kid again. Good luck in the contest.


  • mackereth
    January 23, 2008

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    First of all, i would like to thank you for entering this contest, just by doing this, you are giving hope to everyone that this has affected. Wow, i love this, not just some parts, but the whole thing! This would not only give hope to him, but his family as well! Thanks again for your entry, and good luck in the contest.

    p.s. enter as many of your children's writes as you want, the more there are, the more i get to read, and i love reading these things, they give me hope for this little boy.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 23, 2008

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    Ahh this is cute I don't think there's nothing wrong writing children's poetry like this. After all the old time poets did it too. I got bashed for my little spider poem once . That was so rude. The poem was wrote for children for crying out loud. Good luck with this very well written Poem Dear.


  • StarEyes
    January 23, 2008

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    I knew I would see one in here from you! And I was right You did a great job on this one! I love it... Sometimes the simple ones, are the most enjoyable to read!! I love it!!

    Best of luck to you in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • mommyof2
      January 23, 2008
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      lol I haven't written a children's one in a while. Glad you enjoyed it and you're right...sometimes the simple ones are the most enjoyable, especially when not feeling well. Thanks for the kind words and dropping by to read. ~mommy

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