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A Day

It's one of those

Nothing goes right 

Didn't sleep well last night

The day a gray and rainy sight

Serial Killer or Kill Yourself days

 

So I pull all that shit in

And try to start again

Cause I haven't got the energy

To kill a punch of people

Given my short attention span

And kill yourself, kill yourself

Has become the white noise

That is the cadence in my head

 

Ah, but I will never ignore it

Because that hiss still has venom

Which means that somewhere

The fangs wait

So what shall I do with my

Serial Killer or Kill Yourself blues

 

Umm... I guess I could

Buy a bag of M&M's

Decimate the bag

Devouring each one

In whole scale slaughter  

Boosting my blood sugar

With forbidden fruit

To appease the waiting snake

Author notes

This poem express my need to make someone pay for the horrors I have endured. But this stupid master need I have to leave the world a better place than I found it wont let me. My memmories scream for blood, and my heart tries hush them with love. That makes me turn the hate on myself, since I seem to be the thing stopping my long awaited vengence .

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  • my--i u--k i
    January 28, 2008

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    damn. i like this. um yeah i like the first stanza, damngood. the rest.......slightly weaker. but this is still a good write.


  • sonata
    January 23, 2008

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    I know exactly how it is. the m&ms made me laugh but they also made it bitter as if you meant to be sarcastic.


  • naughty-babe-badgurl
    January 23, 2008

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    WoW!

    u make me feel like ur me! i mean thw way we think is quite alike..... n i like the our vocabulary...
    after reading this i feel a little pain and i dont know where it is coming from...

  • carole21
    January 23, 2008

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    in control

    better to be in control . . good dark write . . liked "Has become the white noise" and "To appease the waiting snake" . . good luck in the contest . .


  • movedon
    January 23, 2008

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    Wow! Daily things in life tend to throw us curve balls we aren't ready for. And even when we are ready for them, there's always something extra that hits our weak spots. You wrote this poem very well! Wonderful job!


  • vampiricarrot
    January 23, 2008

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    every day we fight a mental battle with ourselves, from the smallest of things such as, how should i wear my hair to the larger issues, such as you have portrsyed in this brilliant piece, i really enjoyed this piece (for want of a better word- enjoyed doesn't seem quite right)i like the imagery you have used and the idea of your imortality as a waiting snake.
    well done
    =)


  • Jade-
    January 23, 2008

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    Wow, I really like this :-]

    You used some cool words that made it really unique. I'm not a great judge - all I can say is that it's very good, very intersting...

    I DO feel it - but what I feel, I'm not sure.

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