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Wishing

I sit upon my roof,
Looking at the sky.

It's past midnight,
And the clocks have frozen to a stop.

I see my star,
Falling towards the ground,
And I make my wish.

I wish
For a boy,
One who can please,
One I can love,
One who loves me.

I wish he's a musician,
Singer or whatever,
And that he can truely see me,
Not the one he thinks I am.

I wish,
That with all my heart,
I can experience true love
Once I meet him.

I wish
He has the strength
To break through this bubble,
I've become encompassed by.

But most of all,
I wish he'd love me
For who I am,
Not what he wants me to be.

I wish,
But now my star is gone,
Far away from here.

I wish...

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  • Decorus Somnium
    February 23, 2008

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    I often wish on falling stars. Don't know why...I guess it gives me some kind of peace. Great, lovely poem. Loved the ending.
    Nice job!
    Keep writing


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 8, 2008

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    I think a lot of girls have that very same wish. Sweet write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Simple-Fairytale
    January 23, 2008

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    this is a pretty poem about a wanted guy. stop looking and wishing and he will come with time. You just have to enjoy the time until then : ] cute poem.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 23, 2008

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    when you wish upon a star, makes no difference who you are, anything your heart desires will come true. funny about that song they never say that it will happen in time, so just wait, you never know. keep it flowing

    • xXnotXbrokenXx
      January 23, 2008
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      i remember that song. i dont remember where i heard it, but i do remember it.

  • Bjarne gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    A start toward self appreciation

    One thing to remember as you journey through life into adulthood is that you must have love to give and receive love. Translation: You need to love and respect yourself in order to understand and give love.

    Through your writes, I surmise that you are on the way finding your self and your self appreciation. Your stuff doesn't suck, it is an honest expression of what you are feeling. Most people do not share that kind of honesty. Best wishes!
    Bjarne


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    That was such a lovely wish...so honest and sweet. I think this will come true for you one day...just keep wishing and believing!!!

    Thanks for the entry and best of luck!!!

    Az

  • DyingWish
    January 22, 2008
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    Cute! I like hows its kind of a story. and about the boy: We ALL wish for that. ><

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