On the outside looking in
most don't see what's wrong,
some say i live a good life
others say it's a good song,
for all those looking in
i'll set the record straight,
i'm sad to say
my life isn't all that great,
some people have problems
others have Crices',
my life is divided up into
so many different slices.
On the outside looking in
most don't hear me mumble,
a prayer to God
to help me be humble,
you see a smiling face
and you never see my tears,
the only reason i smile
is to hide the things i fear,
in a world of confusion
you know what's right and what's not,
but in this world of illusions
a wrong decision is all you got.
On the outside looking in
through the window you stare,
but once you come through the door
what you see is hard to bare.
A contest entry
- Invite Only: Favorites by Lj-.
600 points, ended March 4, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HELP! HELP! I CAN'T DO IT ALONE! by Tempa Lee.
300 points, ended March 6, 2008, 35 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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I love this one!!!
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WOW!! I love that!
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Love it, and I can so relate. great write, good flow, and congrats on the trophy
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People aren't always what they seem, huh.
Great job
Congrats on your win.
Loved the poem ♥
Keep it up braw!
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HAHA. Oh, how I know that feeling. This is wonderfully written. I could really relate to it.
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This really is an amazing poem!
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wow this is a really really well-written and relatable poem. nice job
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thanx
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Okay wow,amazing.I really really like this poem.
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hey this is Dani the judge of the contest. i meant to tell everybody that i will be as honest and harsh if i have to be. better hear the truth from someone now then the truth from the real critics later. PERFECT! PERFECT! you're the only poem i came across that i have actually given a 10 to. GREAT job. you did a great job. I loved it. good luck.
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this is a great poem! i really like what you write. You have a way with words. Its quite moving actually. I myself have been through a lot of crap but you get over it. I think this poem is very well written. Congratulations on such great poetry.
Nakatrea
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Hey, this really touched me because I feel the same way a lot of the time. You did a wonderful job of expressing your emotions so poetically.
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Wow
That's a lot, I mean like what you're saying and the way you say it. I love it, very detailed and interesting. I haven't read much of your poetry in a while, I've been real busy with High skool stuff. But I'm goin to read a few more then get back to work. Lov ya -
hey D...it's been awhile since i read some of your work and for that i am sorry. i have been working a lot and just had the time to add some of my poetry online. so hopefully you can check it out. but as far as this poem goes....AMAZING. i loved it from start to finish and that's for real. you did a great job.
~Dani~
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'in a world of confusion
you know what's right and what's not,
but in this world of illusions
a wrong decision is all you got.'
This is so amazing!!! Very touching! that above was my favorite part! this is wonderful and soo true for some poeple!!
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Love this...I can relate, this poem really touched me on a personal level. Great write
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This is a really sad write. Lately a lot of people have been writing sad things lately. Curse winter weather. Haha. Anywayz... This is a wonderful poem. It is very true. Well look at it this way; you don't have wear a mask on AP. ^.^ Either way, whatever is going on I hope it goes better for you. And thus, I finish my totally useless comment with this.
"Person One: Life Bites!
Person Two: OWWWWW! It bit me!
Person One: I warned you."
I have no idea. Hope it made you laugh. I found it mildly amusing.
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