wax indicated draining
from my ear during
wheezing of husband
beauty bogus
at mirror after argument,
trained health...
to more than gentle compliment
cringe not at crying
poor guy can give
hand brush
while putting on gloves he looked up
at me in window wondering screen painting
and I was in concentrated sunshine wearing his tank top
signature around mouth,
face smiles at your name
manuscript complexion
knocking, I'll sing too
no interruption of tune
of beat in absence
bother with benefit
back and forth child
could get mirth of rhythm
jolly is luscious as lunch that has soaked
up purpose more than pretty
and sore foot got to phone call
as to know it by scribble
Author notes
I'll look at it again, might be read through rotation edit
good luck isn't softest success
emoticons and the applause don't dilate my learning eye
A contest entry
- Gentle Winds by Summer Dawn.
360 points, ended February 8, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
grey lets other things sparkle
Comments
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8.i will judge this contest w/in the next 24 hours. just letting everyone know. take care.
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I liked the language you generated for me too
Wind W h i s p e r... typing that makes me feel a flow in a way you may want known more than just word, kinesthetic connection ~
I'm sorry my sporadic time lately didn't get to take advantage of the twenty four hours extra notice even, and I lost earlier note's urgency to have assurance for softness with the write. I'm delighted it displayed something nice to be counted as HM.
I'll gladly move the points to a sweet excitement of mine, an account stirring gradually about babies. I'll soon sort my schedule with that; as a little lullaby my girl asked for and I said I'd sing it with 300 or so breaths, like a year it could go by fast with seasons of enthusiasm winding down to storage of dreams ~
thanks again for your happiness with what response I could give your prompt,
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very interresting piece. i really enjoyed the imagery usage in this poem. i am a huge fanatic of metaphoric usage, as i really enjoy things that make your mind slow down and think alot. i will dive deeper into this at a later time to be sure it clings to the thoughts of gentleness, but overall, as i have read, lovely and wonderful piece of work here.
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