The world is stained a different shade
When I look back and see your face.
My mind selects a darker hue
As memories fall into place.
For twenty years we shared a home.
I trusted you with all my dreams.
I felt with you they were secure.
You took that trust and ripped the seams.
You left without a single word.
A secret exit, planned without
A thought for those you left behind.
A coward’s way, there is no doubt.
The children cried a thousand tears
But we survived and carried on.
You thought we’d crumble, think again.
Our lives are richer now you’re gone.
So now you’re back with sorry smiles.
A coward still, you left her too.
This endless round of to and fro
Will stop, there is no place for you.
The world is stained a different shade.
My mind selects a brighter hue.
This is my life and now I’m free
A future painted without you.
Author notes
Inspired by my ex partner who left a year ago.
A contest entry
- Open Contest About Love by bruntbeauty.
1050 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellently painted picture
A great "rising from the ashes" kind of poem. Hope your EX can find his way onto a path where he can rise from his ashes too - even if it won't include you.
Being told by my wife of 20 years, that she wanted to separate, with no warning or willingness to work at saving the marriage, has me feeling your pain. My entry, ...Dream a High.Way, reflects my need to lay out just how we each let this come to be.
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Sad and inspiring all in the same write, Good job, both on the poem and on Your life.
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Great piece
Well done , this is very well written...shows the inevitable heartache with any separation or divorce....very nice rythym and flow....good luck in the contest.....
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Excellent
Oh wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What an excellent penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Best of luck to you in this contest.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing.
*S* Cynthia
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I cannot express in words how much I loved this piece. It was gorgeous! If you were in front of me right now I'd give you a huge hug. Seriously, this is a beautiful poem. Thank you for the entry and best of luck to you!
I know how you feel exactly, so I guess that's why I'm so connected with this.
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Thank you
for the hug :-) here's one coming straight to you. Thanks for your feedback too, very much appreciated. It was a tough time but we survived - hopefully this poem closed the door forever on that chapter of our lives in a positive way. Thank you so much for your insight, -
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I know how you feel. But at first I made nothing but negative poems about my thoughts and feelings towards the man who ruined us. I finally realized that he wasn't worth the time in my mind and closed our door as well. It gets better, I promise. You'll just take a while to heal and in the end it will feel like the pain you went through was silly, because you'll make it. Good luck!
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well, a great inspiration I'd say! Love it! Especially your beginning and ending verses. Love how you have painted the 'hues' of how this affected your life....and especially with a brighter hue for your now brighter future.
Great wording, reads nicely, great images and emotion.
Well done.
good luck in your contest.
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thanks
its good to be back! :-)
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