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stressed to achieve

pressure packaged inside a crystal hour glass
asserting itself upon my conscious and unconscious walls
my subconscious steals a glance in the direction of the time keeper
and cringes with each grain of sand that falls, falls, falls...

i press on diligently, applying my mettle
but my psyche deliberately meddles
forcing each grain of sand upon me like metal
my goal now seems unattainable
but my soul focuses on the medal

 

stress to achieve

is stretched by minions of deceit

i cant compete, im partially incomplete

for within im without, saplings begin to sprout

from a million seeds of doubt

 

i want to do this, i must do this

i cant do this, to struggle is useless

i falter, i stumble

finished before i begin

even the mighty oak bends to the will of the wind

im just a tool of the beast and success is a sin

 

should i give up before i give in

should i stand and fight

like the sun against the night

the knight versus the ogre

or just remain mediocre

 

i want this, i need this

i breath this, i bleed this

so if success is a sin

open up the gates of hell...

and let me in!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 





 

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  • liaanne
    May 24, 2008

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    You're a great writer, and I think you will make even better things in the future. This was so honest, and made me imagine exactly what you were talking about. Great Job


  • LadyLavender gold member
    January 27, 2008
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    I love this...yes I do

    I want to first begin with a compliment to you as a writer. this write is brilliant. I felt truth, brevity but most of all, coming to terms with desires that mean so much to you. While reading this, I saw myself watching a powerful speaker, with fortitude and eloquence spill from his soul words that are compounded by a "universal" thinker.

    I love this. Yes, I do.