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Calypso

The spirit that sings and echoes all around,
That voice which comes from deep far down,
The cry that appears from no where,
So much sadness and all that despair.

 

She sobs and wails as it gyrates amongst the waves,

Her solitude and loneliness and all in her watery grave,

Stood here on the deck homing in on her cry,

Wanting so many answers and reasons why.

 

I stare into the ocean so far below,

The swirling images of her story she shows,

She was condemned so long ago and sent to the depths,

Invading her mind and past with her filling me with threats.

 

In love with the man they call Davy Jones,

Cursed by her heart with a crew of his own,

Scared for all eternity and bound to the Dutchman,

Forever watching and observing that haunted man.

 

To see her caressing the waves and her tears rolling in,

The highest tide up against our boat knowing she'll win,

Swirling skies and the water combing us along,

Each wave like a strong and separate prong.

 

The whirlpool embedded in the ocean now pulling us down,

Waiting for us with evil grin and her trident and crown, 

Patterns of her face encrusted in the seabed below,

Lost without a trace to a watery end and forever we'll go...

Author notes

inspired by the myth of the Goddess named Calypso and aspects of the film "Pirates of the Carribbean - At World's End"

propmt numero four "Pfft, that was a challenge?"
p.s. hope this is acceptable

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  • Riftkin gold member
    April 17

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    I enjoyed this poem of yours..
    and want to wish you the best
    with it in my contest.

    As your words have proven to be
    worthy of reading by me and all others.

    Riftkin

  • This is very good. I thank you for entering the contest. I only saw one peom from you so you will not have a divided point total. Out of a 100 you've made a 65. thank you for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. kahy


  • Captain Obvious
    February 6
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    this was great. :]
    good luck!


  • Damnednforgotten
    January 21
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    I do like the poem. Very much so, in fact. And if the rules wheren't specified to ABAB or ABCABC format, you would have had a rather high chance in not only completeing, but even winning. Despite how much I loved the movie, and the poem. You did not meet the first rule.


  • snakeprincess742
    January 19

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    well i like it but i wonted orangality something from your nightmares but its a good entry anyway well done

  • ecrivain01
    October 16, 2008
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    Interesting write ...

    thanks for entering.


  • Kimojuno
    October 7, 2008

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    Wonderfully done and wonderfully written, you pen it well and the flow is excellent.

    Thank you for entering,
    Jeff.


  • Riamh
    September 19, 2008

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    I like it. Well penned. Thank ye fer enterin it in this competition.
    Arrr"

    Slayer


  • TabbyCat
    September 17, 2008

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    The last two stanzas were my favorites.

    "each wave like a strong and separate prong." The best line for me.

  • Broken-Bones
    September 13, 2008

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    Your description in this piece is what makes it stand out to me, I thought you really painted a clear images. I especially loved the line "To see her caressing the waves and her tears rolling in," The of the tears and the water at the same time just gave me a really powerful vision. I liked the way you brought the emotions in to the piece as well , i felt it really added some understanding. Great work and a Great Idea x


  • Hecate616
    February 14, 2008
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    wow. this was very well written. best of luck


  • Falcon Child
    January 29, 2008
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    I like the use of the goddess of the sea! Just to ask, are you a Pirates fan?


    • Passionate Phoenix
      January 29, 2008
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      how did you guess? lol actually I got the idea from listening to a song called Calypso by John Denver, so I googled some images and found a few I liked and so used them as a prompt. Pirates helped a few ideas tho xx


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 22, 2008
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    bravo!

    This is best write I believe you've done to date! flow ,and rhyme were perfect! good job!

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