I'm a faded-photocopied dream
left behind.
Perfection wasn't found
in the vibrancy
I once offered.
Time moved on too quickly...
Next to technicoloured
visions
I am an aged achromatic acrobatic;
tumbling
through time's bleached
corridors of rememberances.
You once said I was resplendent
but where are you now?
Where am I?
Forever reminscing
the days of rainbows.
The hues of who I was...
once...
with you.
Author notes
Prompt: She Dreams in Blue
A contest entry
- "I'm On Fire Burning Up These Mysteries" by tigress3737.
600 points, ended January 24, 2008, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Congratulations on winning the Silver. Your poem was well written. I like the mention of the rainbows and the hues of who you were. Very nice.
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Thank you
I worked really hard on this. Writing like this doesn't come easily to me. I'm so glad you liked it!
E-M
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Beautiful poem, lovely sentiments and wording. Great piece and thanks for entering.
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excellent
LOVED EVERY LINE AND EVERY WORD OF THIS.THE IMAGERY AND THE ALLITERATION ARE A PERFECT VEHICLE FOR YOUR EMOTIONS.THE LAST THREE LINES ARE PERFECTION.WELL DONE.
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Thank you That really means a lot to me. It wasn't the direction I thought it was going to go in, but sometimes you have to follow where the words take you
E-M
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This was interesting... a little abstract but not bad... I think that creative things you wrote into this were lovely, nice word choice. Good luck in the contest.
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