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Gentle moments...

Evening breezes walked with us
Blowing my hair on your face.

We reached the beach
You held me in your arms
Moved my hair from my face
Touched your lips on mine

Sweetheart, its time to say goodbye.
Tears started rolling down my cheeks

You kissed them dry
Its just few days, Hun!

Few months, I complained.
You laughed and I melted in your arms.

Please come back soon
I'm waiting for you...

Author notes

Saying goodbye is really not easy...

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  • BeautifullyBroken42
    August 23, 2008

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    Thanks for your entry. It was a wonderful write. Filled with emotion and very descriptive. Very well done. Um yea I am just gonna say this cuse it's a PW but check the rules. Anyway great job and good luck.


  • Summer Dawn
    February 5, 2008
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    4.i will judge this contest w/in the next 24 hours. just letting everyone know. take care.


  • Summer Dawn
    February 1, 2008
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    a sad moment of remembrance. very gentle thoughts. nice write.


  • paullallady silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    What a heartfelt sadness there is
    in this piece of poetry. Parting from
    a loved one is never easy and yet you
    captured the emotion perfectly.


    • peru
      January 23, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment.
      I am never able to say goodbye with a smile.
      This poem has a small part of me in it.

      Thanks.
      Take care and God bless

      --peru.


  • x-Suffocateing-x
    January 22, 2008

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    Aww! This is so cute. It's short, sweet, and so the point. I love how it makes such a perfect scene in so little words. It's great. Keep up the good work!


    • peru
      January 22, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the comment. really helps and inspires.
      Thanks a lot!

      Take care and God bless

      --Peru.


  • exenia
    January 22, 2008

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    just a piece of love, but so precious

    we all want the same
    have noone to blame
    have one for our sorrow
    and someone to follow
    to love and to care
    and everyhting share

    • peru
      January 22, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the comment.
      It really inspires you to write.

      Just a piece pf love but so precious!
      I AGREE.

      Take care and God bless

      --Peru.

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