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Delighted

whispering on your lips
so warm
my hand grazes
over your silken figure
the heated moment
so graceful
your touch
so gentle
tasting the delight
in your eyes
these are the moments
i love

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  • shortyjo
    February 4, 2008
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    Gorgeous

    Wow, beautiful and sensual. Love the ending, makes it sweet.

  • The tie guy
    January 26, 2008
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    SWEEEET!

    Sweet poem. Very erotic without the "bad" language. Very loving poem. I truly enjoyed it!


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 22, 2008
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    SO TENDER AND SWEET!!!!!!

    These truly are the moments when one feels truly loved.

    • SurrenderMyHeart
      January 23, 2008
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      you mean the sexual ones cause this was defenitely it. but meant to be soft and sensual like me =)


  • Poetry and I Inc
    January 22, 2008

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    Good job. Now with a few small changes
    it'll be just fine. It's a really great
    start I think. For instance, some punctuation
    would bring out the feeling of the poem. In this case,
    not much is needed. Wherever you pause, add a comma. If it's more like a sigh, add "..." and as for the wording itself...I'd just say branch out. Don't just think outside the box, imagine there is NO box.

    Good job dear.
    Keep penning.

    ~The Inc."

    ~The Inc."

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