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China Doll

painted face
feeling RIDGED
  and        hollow
like            there's
  not          a thing
inside this shell
with pale skin
dead eyes
deadeye
bulls-eye
and
i'm
f
  a
      l
        l
      i
    n
g

into









nothing
I am a china doll
Who's been knocked
off the table

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  • Forgot2Breathe
    January 22, 2008

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    This is great. I love the metaphor simile thing between you and a broken china doll, really cool. And its dirty pretty awesome like.

    inside this shell
    with pale skin
    dead eyes
    deadeye
    bulls-eye