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{How Can I After Our Dance}

how can i confess?
about the way you make me feel
should i be quiet and wait for you

how can i stop myself?
i want to shout from the roof tops
scream to get you to notice me

how can i tell you?
that i get lost in your eyes
i wait all day to see your face

how can i ignore tonight?
dancing under the hazy stars
holding me close to your heart

how can i confess?
about the way you make me feel
confess that i love you






Author notes

both these pictures inspired me to write this poem. the poem is a true story from my life actually. i danced with my friend i like and now i have so many questions about how i should i act around him and how can i act like i have no feelings for him when i do.

http://psygothic.deviantart.com/art/fwhy-30089835

 http://decline.deviantart.com/art/Dance-of-Death-17426578

 

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  • Nighttime angel
    March 29, 2008

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    this is something that I can relate to at this moment in time. these feelings can cause a lot of confusion, especially when its a good friend that you love. there is no directions that one can be given to help one make this decision. its a 50/50 shot on this.. I am glad that you wrote this for many reasons. know that you aren't the only one that is going through this. there are many who have or are going through this. your friends will be there for you when you need them.. but ultimately the decision is yours.

    excellent job with this.

    thank you for entering & good luck

    kat

  • Nighttime angel
    February 9, 2008
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    the poem is excellent and about a difficult subject as it is. I can relate to part of this poem. the feeling of liking/love with someone. its a sticky situation. if you don't say anything, then you may regret it. on the other hand if you do how will it turn out. I can suggest only some ideas. the ultimate choice is yours. weigh all the possibilities before doing so, but also go with your heart on this one. what feels right to you.
    you are a very talented writer and will go far.
    trust yourself.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Blooming Poet
    February 8, 2008

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    I don't know how you should, but just one piece of advice tell that person before its too late, I know trust me. Not telling someone could be the biggest mistake


  • Kathryn Bowden
    February 8, 2008
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    wow, nice write. good flow, I enjoyed your emotional and insightful take on a difficult subject


  • micol
    January 27, 2008

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    You do a good job dealing with a difficult subject--the poem depends on/develops through images triggered by questions, rather than by merely explaining or asserting, which makes it stronger and much more interesting than most. The repeated questions give it a sense of structure and form, as well as a rhythm picked up and carried by the subsequent lines in each stanza. Well handled.

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