teeth tore into verboten flesh
tapping life's vein
eternal damnation
Author notes
Quickie 10 words
Prompt:
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie by February Moon.
300 points, ended January 21, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please give an honest review of this, considering the given prompt, I can take it ~smile~
Comments
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This one is awesome! congrats on bronze but this was good dam good!
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I like it. The darkness in the poem
and the picture compliment each other.
Kudos to you. -
nice, i mean more then nice this is great, the pic and the words flow like water and sunshine, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest
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... love the pic too... perfect 4 this
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I object, this deserves gold but I'm not the judge 
very powerful poem in such few lines, my favorite type of poetry.
well done..
hope all is well on your end
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now THIS one was a lot better than the last one I read ... strange how it only got the bronze huh?
anyway, I thought it was really good - that apple caused a LOT of crap!!!!
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I haven't read the prompt. So this is my thought. My last line would have been.
creating death. Life was eternal in the Garden. Man chose his course. God knew we would. We created our own damnation. He made sure of salvation. smile.
Very powerful lines my Lady. Rustynite.
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Okay, i can see it. I like the word choice and I has dark undertones to it. I think youdid well and you got a bronze trophy so the judge was impressed by it.
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"Verboten" is the awesomest word I've heard all year.
Congrats on your shiny!
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This is awesome! I can't even find any words other than awesome to describe it! Good luck.
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Your poetry is beautiful.
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