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You breathe life in to me

            This city's playing out a parody
            A super hi-octane lifestyle tragedy
            -There's always some hype over nothing
            snappers round some debris try na bake a new celebrity 

            you 'cline through the day
            past the shovers and the snares
            thru mad crowd crushes
            and the psycho stares

            I need some time to just unwind
            some chill space to reshape my strategies
            - a pad to collapse, lift and relax
            somewhere I can rest my anatomy

            You breathe life into me

            This city's canned like a sitcom
            it can do hyper-plus, it can't see what's wrong
            even in - an evolutionary sense it all comes across as             
            pretty muthaf**kin dense

            it goes so slow when you need to survive
            and so fast when it tries to eat you alive
            but still you're gentle with the petals
            and tough with the thorns
            that you end up made of metal

            I need some time to just unwind
            some chill space to reshape my strategies
            - a pad to collapse, lift and relax
            somewhere I can rest my anatomy

            You breathe life into me

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  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    January 25, 2008
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    I agree with crystaldust about the different levels of emotion here. There are a few places I wanted to tweak but they boil down to personal preference, so I'm leaving them alone You show great potential as a lyrics writer Welcome to AP and thank you for sharing. La x


  • crystaldust gold member
    January 23, 2008
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    crystaldust 23-01-08 21:56
    If this is an example of your lyric writing I hope you'll write many more. Lyrics are a style of poem I know very little about, but for content it is excellent and also for different levels of emotion. So keep on writing and posting. I like this one a lot. ): Joy
    PS I'm definitely not too old to enjoy and understand it.