lay in a field
wind ruffles my hair
peace consumes my body
a sun set marks the end
and something new
stars shine bright
a chilly wave of wind runs through the grass
cools my body
then i nood to sleep
A contest entry
- Gentle Winds by Summer Dawn.
360 points, ended February 8, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i like this contest it got me to go to my happy place
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2.i will judge this contest w/in the next 24 hours. just letting everyone know. take care.
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very peaceful vision. nice attempt at a poem, although i feel there could have been a little more added to this to make it not sound like a rush job or throw together. the contest will not be judged for a week, so if you are in the mood to expand on your writing, i will be looking back before i make all final decisions. please forgive me if my honesty is sounding harsh, but as a former site moderator i was trained to be honest with all writers as best and easy as i can. you may delete this comment also, as u wish. i will come back as i said.
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So simple and sweet. A great experience you have shared here. Small things in life make such a big difference!
Take care and God bless..
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Very nice write here
Makes me want to go on vacation on an island and feel the cool winds while swinging in a hammock in the bahamas
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