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return to me

Through eyes of rippling tear,
droplet’s kiss splashes remembrance on her graceful face
as she awaits stream’s smiles to awaken reality,
calling gently through reflection of time,
‘Return to me.’
Radiance of his spirit continued speaking
on tranquil waters,
mirroring beauty of heart’s desire~
in silent stillness lay.
Staring outward.
Hoping inward.
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~
Hoping inward.
Staring outward,
in silent stillness lay~
mirroring beauty of heart’s desire.
On tranquil waters,
radiance of his spirit continued speaking,
'Return to me,'
calling gently through reflection of time.
As she awaits stream’s smiles to awaken reality,
droplet’s kiss splashes remembrance on her graceful face
through eyes of rippling tear.

Author notes

picture inspired http://galefraney.wordpress.com/
line-unit palindrome (mirrored form poem)... my first EVER!



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  • Metaphorist
    April 23, 2008
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    When it comes to rhyme or form or free verse, you can do it all. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • paulcreates silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    What a great entry you have here gn. What I found key to the form is a smooth, logical middle section and you've done very well with that. It flows so nicely. Good luck in future round(s)

    Paul


  • Frozentearz
    March 16, 2008

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    Congratulations on your Bronze, Truly a you have done a wonderful job with this round of the contest
    This has been an amazing contest!
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz


  • sunny day
    March 16, 2008

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    going, I had to come back and congratulate you for the well deserved bronze trophy that you received in this round. Your excellence has shone again and those angel wings lifted you high as we continue on here. Keep that ink flowing from your golden pen. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 27, 2008

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    If turned sideways, even the shape of your piece reflects angel wings. You have again raised the bar in this contest my friend. An exceptional entry making this one of the toughest competitions in this rounds contest yet.

    Well done.

    My favorite part is the beauty of that gentle call, "return to me" ~ as if it were always known within.

    A wonderfully fluid and gentle flow in this piece - and this a first-time palindrome... Hard to believe. You have presented a beauty with grace and elegance.

    Thank you for this. ~Pamela


    • going nowhere
      January 28, 2008
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      thank you for such a wonderful comment. i love the look of angel wings!


  • Frozentearz
    January 23, 2008
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    Another outstanding write for this contest,
    well done and thanks for sharing,
    Love and LIght
    Frozentearz


  • alivefromlove
    January 23, 2008
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    oh wow, this is really cool! and its a gorgeous poem!!! GREAT JOB!!!!!!!! =D


  • Blue Rew silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    Very soft and romantic words that suit the
    mirrored form beautifully. Well-done poet!
    Blue


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    This was a wonderful interpretation of this picture. I enjoyed the duality of the approach. It was truly a mirror reflection. It is amazing what we can create when challenged with a new form. It was my first time too. Peace, Liz

    • going nowhere
      January 22, 2008
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      thank you... it will be neat to see what everyone comes up with for this because i'm sure it is a first for many of us.

  • sunny day
    January 22, 2008
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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    going, Your first attempt and it is absolutely, positively, fantastic. Rich with imagery and flowing so soft and smooth from the page straight to my heart you have left me breathless with your words penned. What a beautiful reflection of the image given you have created here with your pen that drips of golden ink. Thank you for sharing with all of us and best wishes in the contest. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    beautiful...

    ...it is as though they are both calling from opposite ends to each other. I hope their dreams came true in the end.

    This is a very moving piece and you have conquered the form with something beautiful.


    • going nowhere
      January 22, 2008
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      thank you so much. i'm so glad you picked up on the different perspectives the calling came from.


  • penman gold member
    January 21, 2008
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    Excellent

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • new light
    January 21, 2008

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    i am truly breathless.
    this is so beautifully written dear♥

    i cant even choose any favourite lines out of this.

    BEAUTIFUL

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