I sat with my mouse in hand
and keyboard afront,
browsing the internet
for a friend to connect.
Things started out normal,
chats and banters with you,
our hardassed attitudes
from all we'd been through.
Flirting was fun,
long whispers at night,
I knew from the beginning
this was all so right.
Pain held me back,
I was a little bit shy,
the reassurance you provided
had been buried a long time.
You promised to be there
for my dreams and long haul,
the sound of a lifetime
that played through our calls.
Finally, a special sound-
you begged me that night!
Said it was time to meet eachother,
I couldn't wait to have you in sight.
I stood at your door
my heart pounding so fast,
your arms wrapped me so tightly
like your husband was home atlast!
It felt like forever,
like we were meant to be,
you and I for a lifetime-
it was truly destiny.
A half hour in your arms,
the scent of white diamonds,
that sexy look you returned,
when i looked in your eyes.
You slid your hand in mine
and pulled me into your bedroom,
mad, passionate love created
feeling every pulse within you!
We kissed eachother good night,
I had to go for a while
you had things to accomplish
before you traveled those long miles.
I was blind when i left,
unaware it'd be the last time
I'd ever feel the love you gave,
for it all turned into lies.
No t e x t or a call
to say things were alright,
hours flew into days-
surviving many lonely nights.
Finally a message comes thru
as happiness floods within,
only to read anger, hate, and lies-
telling me you're with him!
Smothered feelings of despair
as my world crashes in,
isolated from betrayal-
alone, with no where to turn.
You raped me of my trust,
took advantage of my heart;
left me standing without closure!
Your echoes of hatred, a peircing dart!
What we had was meant to be
had you been honest with it all,
my life was yours by 'destiny's choice'
instead, you let it fall.
So in closing, love, just know
I will really miss your lies,
and the feeling of 'we were meant to be'
our ending was 'quite the surprise!'
A contest entry
- [x] Lots of options [x] Something for everyone! Read! by Jade-.
450 points, ended January 28, 2008, 37 entries
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Comments
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Very well writen piece here
It flowed perfectly and a great story line .A story often many live through in the rush for love . Living only for the moment leads the heart into destructon
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The emotion can be felt within the lines of your story, heartache for many, it did not feel as if it was a personal journey...you were on, but a journey of another. Good work
~Tia
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Not quite sure why, I think it was the last stanza, but this reminded me of the song 'where do you go to my lovely', a bit of a golden oldie I suppose.
Even if not true for you Dawn, this journey will be one that many people who have connected online will have trodden.
Enjoyed reading this.
Dean
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There was so much I could relate too...it opened the pain in my heart again...although I am very much in love now it still hurts...my life was hers by destiny's choice too...
I do hope you will find a way to heal yourself...it took me soooo long, a lot of pain and tears and sometimes it's just right inside of me again, for instance when I read poems like yours...
I know there is nothing I can say to take away the pain,
just try to hang in there
and write as much as you can...
XXJeannette
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What truly baffles me is Internet Relationships. I can't fathom them. Yes, friends, counterparts, commrads... but lovers?! I simply am not that trusting. My suspicious nature says if it sounds too good to be true then, it probably is too good to be true. Besides, I'm amrried to my childhood sweetheart for the past 35 years. I consider myself fortunate, and blessed.
My heart moans for the woman in this poem. The betrayal is real. I felt it!
Excellent!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Hmmmm well... I'm pretty sure this has happened a whole lot of times to people!! The dangers of internet dating a suppose!
Great story... really took me with it!
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Great job!
i liked how this flowed any many cases and stanzas... in others the ryhme through me off a little, but the feeling was intense and you started out one way and ended another, and it played out very well. i could feel the hate but not so much directed at the person, but more of their lies. betrayal is a good title for this, others could be used, but this one fits well also. I like the stanza "So in closing, love, just know I will really miss your lies..."
you also used the titles name in one of the stanzas which wasn't necessary but made it all the better. great job, enjoyed reading this, it seemed like something very real... true story right? if not, you definatly captured the emotions for this event! great job!
~Madison~
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it is a true story for many, but not mine in this circumstance. thanks madi
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Hey, this is a good poem
It was interesting, kept me wondering. The ending was really great. I can relate to the "I will really miss your lies" part. You had some good emotion in this piece.
Thanks for entering, and best of luck.
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Excellent!
You really tapped into the mood of the situation. Awesome!
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