In serene, quiet genius he did live
his life. Gifts he gave freely to the world.
Through his music he gave all he could give
and his large banner of peace he unfurled.
True to his music he did ever stay.
No one could duplicate his train of thoughts.
That he was loved was shown in the dismay
that the world felt the on night he was shot.
"Give peace a chance" is what he preached the most,
he was a Rock and Roll shaman to me.
I raise my spiritual glass in a toast,
I hope his soul is still filled with esprit.
He wanted the whole world to live as one
but he was killed before the work was done.
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A contest entry
- The Beatles Invasion!!!! by wailinhalen15.
300 points, ended April 24, 2008, 8 entries
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What a lovely comment by cartressa, on your wonderful poem dear friend...so many of their songs evoke so much for so many...I too have entered this comp..after visiting Johns House last year..I wrote an account of that, it left quite an effect..being so close..as nothinhg had been altered since Aunti Mimi..the bureau was there, down with documents on, where he would have sat...Unbelievable.. Hugs Lib x x x
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great piece! thanks so much for entering!
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what a write.. I watch a lot of interesting stuff (hold your horses you know I do run on) and watched a great documentary on him late one night.. God did he have a message..
my favorite song by him though would be Woman.. I guess because my Dad played that constantly for my mom.. Now I know it was their lovemaking song. But she would get this misty look in her eye (mom) and they would slow dance around our lil trailer, and they loved.
In between the fists they normally shared, and angry words spit out of their mouths. They loved to John Lennon.
I wish I could Thank him for that.
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in the grand scheme of things Cat you just did thank him, thanks for the thoughtful comment my friend...peace Terry
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This could be ...
a much better poem if you didn't invert your sentences so much. Otherwise, it's not a bad job, but I hate inverted sentences in poetry. I also can't stand it when people use any form of the verb to do in front of another verb. Why can't you just say:
In serene, quiet genius he lived
his life. ?????????????
Anyway, good luck with your writing in the future and thanks for entering.
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It just jumped out at me in the first verse it should be his instead of his. Lol other than that insignificant spelling mistake this is a wonderful ode to a creative genius that creates joy for his life and work and sadness for his death. The title is puzzling and ambiguous but I like the mystery it adds to the write. It truly is a sonnet, a love song to an amazing mind. Ogreatbaldone your writing continues to delight and inspire.
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Hey jon thanks for the heads up on the spelling error( i hate those) and thanks ofr the nice comment. The title is Lennons middle name- I was going for something different, thanks for stopping by to read...peace Terry
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nicely done
a fitting tribute to great man, musician, song writer, & visionary... rock on forever!!
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